Zake, The Dramatist
'ello! I am Zake. Welcome to my profile.
Writing is fun, hard, and interesting.
Feel free to message me.
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P.S. Profile picture appears to be a shrunk version of this artwork, by Deviantart MenasLG. I think someone else resized it, because I doubt I would've known how to when I first found it on google (but I can't seem to find it anymore, so maybe it was I who resized it).
Recent PostsStorygame lengths :] on 5/8/2020 11:17:08 PM
What browser do you use? on 5/7/2020 11:40:38 PM
Flowchart for Eternal by EndMaster on 5/3/2020 11:43:54 PM
what can I add to my story? on 4/30/2020 6:04:16 AM
If you can see a storygame on someone's profile, it is on sneak peak. Note that some special characters need to be substituted in when trying to get to the game. In this case, the link is: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/A%20camping%20trip~21%20(gone%20wrong) because the exclamation point is a special character.
This is why it is nice when people give you the link, so you don't have to make it yourself.
Alternatively, last I checked, the site extension will replace the title for sneak preview stories with their links, so that you can just click them as normal.
Tiny 'topias Jam on 4/29/2020 11:41:34 PM
Three Games that are actual Hidden Gems on 4/28/2020 10:43:44 PM
Poor DotA 2 devs, despite having a really popular publisher, it never stopped their game from just being a simple hidden gem.
Jokes aside, calling League's system a paywall seems a bit odd to me, since you can also grind for the characters. Although, I guess it is still a paywall from one perspective, since you do still pay (regardless of if it is the in-game or premium currency).
However, by that token, DotA 2 has in-game purchases that give you an advantage: items. Sure, you spend in-in-game currency (gold) to buy them, but that is still a purchase.
Also, if anyone here ever wins some of that esports money, I'd be very interested in knowing. This is because that part of your pitch reminds me of a relative who was like: "Hey, you play games, what games do you play?"
"[Game that isn't DotA 2]."
"Well... DotA 2 has millions of dollars in eSports prizes!"
Anyway, starting with all characters unlocked is obviously pretty damn nice.
Other than that, I heard that DotA 2 was losing players, or dying, or whatever. Granted, all multiplayer games are always said to be dying by someone, so I was curious on your thoughts regarding it, as you'd def know more than me.
I can certainly imagine that being so complicated, if the matchmaking isn't putting newbs with other newbs, they might get discouraged rather easily. However, I do remember DotA 2 and LoL being the big two, and both having a shit-ton of players. I am seeing LoL ads a lot more than DotA 2 ads tho (heck, haven't seen any DotA 2 ads for ages).
You know, I don't remember where I was going with all this.
Ah, hidden gems? Maybe...
Duelyst!? It is interesting to see a card game with a board, and the cards generally had a high power feel to them. The replace mechanic where you take a card from your hand, and swap it with a random card from your deck, up to once per turn, is also something that felt great. The pixel art is nice too. Anyway, the game is no longer supported: no servers and you can't download it anymore. That must make it a hidden gem!
Tiny 'topias Jam on 4/21/2020 10:03:29 AM
Pfft, those 1000 words were easy, since I was already in a writing mood before I pivoted to make them. The actual agonizing part was putting a storygame on hold to write that instead.
Which means that the real horror is that I can no longer use that thread as motivation for finishing a storygame!
Although, I suppose it isn't that bad, as it is in a place where I can technically work on it whenever, and I do want to finish up some of its sections before I begin considering to drop it.
But that doesn't matter right now. What does matter is that I'll do a storygame for this, one with a much smaller scope (which is sort of necessary with a 2000 words limit). However, the 'gimmick' I'm going for will make it take longer than one might expect. These things should thus balance out.
Edit - I've thought about it some more, and I don't think I can pull it off, not properly at least. Too ambitious, or I should say, it requires doing something that I'm not good at. If I ever get better at the particular thing, I might revisit the story. Tis a lesson in hubris, don't let a gimmick force you down a foolish path!
Good thing there's no deadline.
Edit 2 - Hmm, my new attempt has failed. Guess I'll just wait for the word requirement to get even higher, aha.
Tiny 'topias Jam on 4/21/2020 8:33:12 AM
You know what, I just got a crazy idea!
I can only hope it won't take an eternity.
Help with 2nd point of view on 4/18/2020 5:08:33 AM
Ah, I find this to be one of the challenges with writing second person.
Obviously, having all the sentences (or most) start with 'you' can be pretty repetitive.
Generally, I find I can shuffle things around a bit so that the 'you' isn't always the first word, but it does depend on the sentence. I'd say, try to think about what the scene is about, and in what ways you can go about conveying that.
I find that if the reader is a new location, describing relevant things doesn't usually require 'you'. Also, when the player acts, the thing that happens in response/in consequence also tends to not require 'you'. This does all depend on the context tho.
What type of things is your MC doing? Cutting out less important things will not only remove some of the 'yous', it'll also tighten up the story and improve the general pacing.
So, I guess I'd advise seeing if you can rewrite sentences to be more engaging. Also keep an eye out on sentences you can split. ie. You ran up to the truck, and kick it. vs You run up to the truck. Delivering a kick leaves your foot in pain.
This might be a bit more about style, so don't worry too much about my advice, but just consider it. Also, be mindful of the tense you are writing in. I find being actively aware can help me with writing sentences that are more successful. You also don't really want to be switching tense, generally speaking, but that's not what you asked about.
Anyway, I'm curious what others peoples' thoughts on this are, as it is something I struggle with.
Corona Tag! on 4/16/2020 9:56:42 PM
It isn't (which is why there are so few names), but it does use an old setting of mine (that hasn't had anything properly written in it).
If I could've done an excerpt, I'd have used something better, aha.