Mission Mindless

Pretty straight forward story so there's not much to say...

You nailed the "agent" vibe pretty well I'd say...the decorated "Mission Failed" and "Mission Successful" with red and green colors really added to it. Having a countdown timer at the time really helped sell the tension of the story too!

Prose was basic but a bit dodgy at times. Characters at times sounded a bit robotic or like they were regurgitating information to make up for a lack of explanation from the narration...or sometimes the narration seemed slightly inconsistent at times. (And no this isn't because of the agent vibe...its in spite of that lol) Mainly that Agent Andrews...while I'm glad he's in the story...seemed to be reduced to exposition that didn't always feel natural...sometimes it did though which was nice!

Based on your disclaimer...it seemed your story structure was limited by this storygame being made for an assignment? If so that's a shame...but its also an impressive feat given said constraints! Haha!

Needless to say things fit together pretty logically...can't think of any plot holes off the top of my head. Also liked how going to a place at a later time didn't result in the same thing from before...that kind of realism/attention to detail is appreciated!

Also liked how you could solve part of the case but not all of it...leaving you to fail the mission in different ways if you didn't do the full objective.

Carrying over information from failed routes didn't seem to help much in finding the right one...though I could see an attempt for you to guide the player in the aftermath reflection of said failures...which basically just amounted to "Don't trust anyone!". That advice didn't solve the case for you but it did help put you on the right track...sort of anyways...haha!

I did all the Gala route before the rest of the story...was a bit miffed that I couldn't find a way to deactivate the bomb...but I suppose that red herring was just a hint of things to come. Making it clear that the bomb is only half the problem...and that you really want to go after the culprit himself!

Cool enough game I guess...I gave it a 5 for competency and hope you continue to write something better/cooler/more fun in the future! (aka don't let this review deter your efforts...this was a fun read!)

Cheers! ;)

DISCLAIMER:
This was created for an ELA project (on very little time.)
There's only one way to succeed right now (due to the project requirements.)
In the future, I may add endings or create a sequel game...

You have to be a bit lucky to reach success, or use the back button of course, although there are some clues to follow in the text. It's a great concept for a short story-game, I liked it, and will ignore the several spelling & typing errors.

I liked this one, it was a sort of good old-fashioned James Bond type spy thriller with a consistently atmospheric writing style and decent branching. It was a little short and could perhaps have been developed further but I found it a pretty enjoyable read and think the writer did a good job here :)