The Mystery of the Mysterious Time Machine

A fantasy storygame by mickmc

Player Rating4.12/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"

Based on 10 ratings since 02/12/2025
Played 157 times (finished 14)

Story Difficulty4/8

"March in the swamp"

Play Length3/8

"A nice jog down the driveway"

Maturity Level1/8

"Appropriate for all ages"

Stories with this maturity level will not, by design, have any potentially objectionable content. An example of a type story with this rating would be a quiz on mathematics.

Tags

Action Adventure

Fantasy

Science Fiction

Let me start by saying that I was a total nerd as a child (let's be honest, as an adult too).

So I wrote 'choose your own adventure' books (along with lots of other things).

I recently dug this out, I probably wrote it somewhere around 1981, which would have made me 11-12 depending on when I actually set pencil to paper (I can remember that it took a while - but even that - who knows what 'awhile' was back then?!?).

My plan was to NOT CHANGE A THING. But I just couldn't do it. So I corrected the spelling (but I included scans of the original pages if anyone wants to read and see exactly how much of a dummy I was... or am!)

Let me also state for the record that this is possibly one of the worst titles any book could ever have. Ha ;-D

And not to worry, I write much more gooder now.

-m

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Player Comments

Great job! I finished it in a relatively quick time but it was so detailed and thought out. Props to you!

— Bonnie on 2/18/2025 2:25:05 PM with a score of 0

I am very happy wit hmy cavemen bros

— pp on 2/14/2025 6:56:54 PM with a score of 0

5/8

I really liked the amount of options you had and that you also included the handwritten notes when you originally wrote it.

— Fire_Of_The_Universe on 2/13/2025 8:47:20 AM with a score of 0

It was kind of mysterious

— Ogre11 on 2/12/2025 6:24:15 PM with a score of 0

I enjoyed the integration of the notes you wrote as a kid into the story, that lends the story a homemade feel. It was really adorable, and that was a nice touch.

I’d also like to commend you for 14 years on the site, that’s really impressive.

I enjoyed the hand-made quality of the story, and I liked the branching. And for an 11 year old this was really impressive. Thank you for this story, I thought it was really cool.

Obviously, the writing could use some work, but I think you already know that. The passion for writing is obvious though, and for that, well done!

— RKrallonor on 2/12/2025 4:38:05 PM with a score of 0

This story feels quaint and endearing. The inclusion of images from the notebook it was originally written in is a nice touch, and there’s a nostalgic feel added with the page numbers added in the links. Even the name has a childlike charm.
Your handwriting was awful, though.
Since you wrote this a long time ago, there’s not really any point in telling you how you could improve the writing; part of the story’s appeal is that you’ve copied it down exactly how it once was.
Not bad writing at all for a child; a decent length, too. And don’t worry, we’re all nerds here.

— fresh_out_the_oven on 2/12/2025 2:48:05 PM with a score of 0

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