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4 years ago

I'm writing a storygame about the zodiacs and I'm not quite sure how to format it. Should I have it with a health variable so you could die, or should there be no way to die, but ways to lose, or what?

Looking for Advice

4 years ago

Is there a pointed question here, or are you generally asking what people do? Most stories just have end links, good or bad, without a health system. If you want better advice than that, you'll have to put more effort into the question since you gave no background to your story and no context about the problem you're having.

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4 years ago

Well, here's the summary I've written.

There is a hidden realm that watches over the mortal world. There, the embodiments of the ancient constellations reside. Recently, a mysterious force has been taking the constellations. Now, only the twelve zodiacs remain. Take the reigns of one of the twelve and try to uncover the mystery.

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4 years ago
There's no reason to add a health variable unless a combat system plays a role, or you want the game to automatically end after a certain number of bad decisions. There's not much to go on here, but nothing about it sounds like the kind of plot that needs this.

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4 years ago

Ok, thank you! :)

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4 years ago
I do think though that if you're giving the player the option to play any of twelve characters, you're biting off waaaay more than you can chew. That story will be immense unless the choice actually changes nothing, in case there's not much point and you might as well just pick one character to flesh out and focus on.

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4 years ago

I do a little bit at a time. Starting with Aries, I will go through the whole story from each perspective.

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4 years ago
Multiple viewpoints of the same storyline can be a fun little storygame concept, but I find myself failing to think up a plot that's complex and interesting enough to read from twelve different perspectives.

I'd stick to two (a switching pro- and antagonist) or three (Mexican standoff type of story) viewpoints and really work those out.

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4 years ago

Oh, trust me, this'll be interesting... hehehehe *evil laugh*

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4 years ago
Just curious, have you ever read the Kipling story The Children of the Zodiac?

It's one of my favorite mythic fairy tale thingies and pretty unlike most of his other work. Just randomly thought of it after seeing this thread, but you might like it too.

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4 years ago

Here's some more advice, you probably wouldn't have drawn attention to being an alt, if you hadn't decided to make a "goodbye forever" thread as Artsygirl.

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4 years ago

End, what in the world makes you think that Cancer the Crab is Artsy Girl? >.<

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4 years ago

Pardon me?

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4 years ago

Ignore him Cancer. He's obviously mistaken. ^_^

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4 years ago

Um, thanks? (I'm not sure how to respond to this XD)

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4 years ago

Yeah, Artsy Girl was some random troll who recently left the site after causing choas. Really not sure why he thinks you're her. Your art style is completely different. ^_^

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4 years ago

:)

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4 years ago

Personally, I suspect MadHattersDaughter. The resemblance is pretty uncanny. ^_^

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4 years ago

The blue of the stars DOES match the blue of the sunset/sunrise

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4 years ago

Well spotted! ^_^

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4 years ago

And I would have gotten away with it too if it weren't for you meddling kids who know your primary colors!! >:~[

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4 years ago

XD