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12 years ago

Here's the only thing I have to say about this :

 

This time, I will be really trying to make a real novella on this site.  I'll post multiple drafts on the story as on this pattern:

1.  Rough draft, one single path.

2. Rough draft, few paths.

3. Rough draft, detailed paths (AKA main paths).

4. Rough draft, adding minor paths and revising.

5. Revised draft, correcting grammar, improving sentence structure, and adding more descriptive vocabulary.

6.Revised draft, proofreading and putting a WHOLE BUNCH O' CO-Authors/ editors. (Debating if I should get mediocre or the best ones.  You know, the ones that pick one every single mistake like I do.)

7. Revised draft, messing around with pictures.

8. Finishing touches, add a whole bunch of death paths, tiny minor paths (like WoW's sidequests).

9. Finished product.

 

I will post them as published storygames, which will probably annoy JJJ alot, but I would to see the drafts as a path of improvement.

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12 years ago

Besides, give me a type of fiction to work on.  I can write a decent story, as long as I can provide myself with a topic.

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12 years ago

I'd say time travel, since we only really have one story that deals with it and I find it to be a cool concept, but it might be too hard.

So other ideas:

- Running a Country

- Aliens

- Detective work (hunting down a serial killer)

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12 years ago

Extra Ideas:

- What if storys

- "romance/love" storys like snow

- Being God for a week?

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12 years ago
Theres actually at least 2 stories that have time travel. My "the machine" and somebody elses where they move around a ship ...

My other story might have something to do with aliens as well ...

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12 years ago
Get inspired by something rather than demanding ideas from someone else and you'll end up with a stronger finished product.

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12 years ago

I have a feeling he won't write anything anyways lol.

If you can't even come up with an idea for a story on your own, there's no way you can make a decent story.

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12 years ago
Yeah, I agree.

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12 years ago
No, don't publish each of your drafts. Just put sneak preview on and then post a link here.

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12 years ago

I agree, I think you should consider just writing enough to give the player a good idea of where you're going, and after getting feedback on that, finish the whole thing before you publish again. I know I'd get sick of reading the same story that many times with only minor changes.

However, I'm glad to see you're making a proper story.

 

As for something to write about, I think the easiest thing is to be inspired by books or movies, and then work from there.

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12 years ago

Yeah, this is a great way to get playtesting feedback and allows you to continue to make edits without unpublishing and such.

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12 years ago

Okay, by far, thw whole being god idea for a week was a pretty unique topic, but I decided no, it's TOO unique.

Love stories don't feel like my thing.  I don't know how to make a character turn into a realistic human.

Alien movies always tend to be about aggressive aliens exploding the human race, and so do the stories here.  (EndMaster has made a Star-Wars-esque-ish-sorta-thing.)

Running a country sorta thing is like Eternal, many people say I'm too naive to know goverments.

 

For now, I'm STILL OPEN for new ideas.

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12 years ago

Detective work might be in the question, but that would incorporate a plethora of items.  I'm not such a good advanced storywriter.

What if stories?  What if I don't want to?  I don't want this site to become a debate, I think some of us know of a story including human genetics that had some arguments about that subject.

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12 years ago

Alien movies always tend to be about aggressive aliens exploding the human race, and so do the stories here.  (EndMaster has made a Star-Wars-esque-ish-sorta-thing.)

You could, you know, not just copy everything you've seen in movies and other stories, and instead be creative.

That's an option you know.

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12 years ago

You're a lawyer that's tryiing to find out the contents of a box that has a combination which will set off a bomb if you enter the wrong combination. Also, you're on a crowded bus. Roll with it.

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12 years ago
Write a proper villian story. Every story I've ever read tries to portray the assholes as people with troubled pasts and a warped sense of justice. If you write a story where the protagonist is throwing babies into beartraps more often than punctuation is used, if I can see that the guy I'm supposed to be has no redeeming qualities. Not trying to save a loved one with his evil, not disturbed at losing his mother to some other bad thing, but he's being evil purely for the sake of the story, or his enjoyment. Making decisions like that, would be awesome. Like the Necromancer. His girlfriend died. He wants to be good at something. He's just doing what he thinks is protecting himself. As wonderful as the story is, those are all classic villian cliches. Write something that sets you apart, because you can't compete in the same field as some of the writers on this site, none of of us mortals can hope to write an epic Jungian Psychology/Adventure game, or a classic good vs Evil magic warriors story. You want unique. Firstly, no one accuses you of stealing ideas, secondly, you keep away from the tropes. And if you aren't that imaginative. Zombies.

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12 years ago
Inb4 loveSICK. That was far too comedic for me to consider it a true villian story. Yes, he's a incestious psycho doctor who does that shit for fun (with an abusive childhood. Naturally). It should be serious, think Heath Ledger as joker, but not insane. Make him cold and monsterous and real.

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12 years ago

Like me?

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12 years ago
I've tried to, but I can't seem to get that VILLAINOUS title, because somewhere around here, somebody already has it and abandoned it. I've been thinking about one of my dreams turned into a story, but the plot is still quite a bit foggy.

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12 years ago

how bout a story about multiple reality/ parallel world? Like for example you are a being capable of transcending into different dimension and world and your duty is to fix things not belonging into that world by either sending it back or destroying it? You can also add a plot where an idiot messing with the worlds almost rip all the fabric of reality into nothingness and you have to find him and kil him

or maybe one about you sleeping and entering the dream world and you can have crazy encounters with dream creature from outer space that are actually originated from the distance future who came back in time in your dream to warn you not to do what you will do as the ending?

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12 years ago

So like a dimension jumper? Where you have to protect every planet under your control but near the end of the story you have to choose between three or more choices?

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12 years ago

lol no just dimensions, you stay in the highest dimension - the realm of the gods and oversee all the lower dimension and your job is to prevent  things from each dimensions from mixing into other dimensions

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12 years ago
Paraplaniac? Wolf Spirit? No thanks.

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12 years ago

I highly disagree with the villians statement. When I read a book or story, I want something a bit more complex than "this guy is evil... deal with it", I want to know why he's evil, his ideologies behind being evil, and what he does to make him evil. Books and stories that start right off the bat with a mustachioed villian who ties women to train tracks for no reason make me lose interest very quickly.

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12 years ago

I agree, all characters, including (and to my opinion, especially) the villains, have to have a certain amount of dept to them.

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12 years ago
Granted, I didn't mean he should just be a cutout for the hero's manly antics. I just don't think villians need to have a troubled past. The villian is the character who we're supposed to hate, have no empathy for. We're supposed to be cheering on the protagonist to kill him in a dreadfully ironic manner. I don't need to know how bad his life is, how what he's doing is right in a twisted way. That's not what villians are for. Look at Darth Vader. He was one of the greatest villians of all time pre-phantom menace. Literally, all he does is blow up planets and fuck shit up for the rebels. Then we had him starting out as a whiney child being corrupted. I for one couldn't give a shit why he's such a badass. He is, and I coped with that. Look at Sauron. As far as I'm aware, there's no explanation to why he's such a cunt. Is it needed? No. Bond villians don't have sob stories, not the good ones anyways. What I meant by a proper villian is, a person who is properly evil. They don't have to have to have a moral event horizon, because before it, they're not villians. Antagonist character development nowadays is 90% dead loved ones, and that's what causes me to lose interest. Heroes can only be as good as their enemies are bad.

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12 years ago

I prefer villains that can both be feared and pitied, but to each is own I guess.

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12 years ago

The thing most movies try to get across is that there is no good or evil, simply protagonist and antagonist. You might think that characters should have no depth to them (and by that I mean you think the villians should have come out of the womb kicking puppies) but that's not the case. Even your main example, Darth Vader, wasn't a "pure evil" villian, at the end of the original trilogy they had him redeem himself and come back to the ranks of the Jedi. When they had Vader come back from the Dark Side and make himself good again, he lost the "pure villian" model you're looking for.

If you want to find the pure villians, go look at kids' movies, because they are the only audience who doesn't want character development.

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12 years ago
There are some people that consider the Eternal a more unsympathetic villainous character than the Necromancer or the Doctor despite him not committing world genocide or just being a flat out psychopath. I suppose he still wouldn't really qualify as a pure villain due to his upbringing though, plus he can sort of become "light gray" by the end.

If you want a rotten villain that's doing evil stuff with no remorse and it isn't done in a comical way, you could try the unofficial "fifth ending" for the Survivor in Ground Zero. He probably doesn't qualify as a pure villain either though since he doesn't start out evil and he has a semi-Vaderish break down at the very end of that path, but in the scheme of things he's pretty bad and there isn't really any reason behind it other than "Hey it's the apocalypse and I just realized I can do whatever the hell in this lawless world!"

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12 years ago
Typing on my phone, with a cracked screen, so that's my excuse for taking ages and my spelling mistakes. A galaxy S is not sufficent for debating on a storygame forum. Handicaps aside, I don't really see the Eternal being a villian. He's doing what all the soldiers are trained to do in killing all threats to his empire. He just happens to be better than everyone else at it. So he's more of an anti-heroic-dragon from a bystanders view. In my opinion of course. Now the author's here I can't claim to know his story from anything other than a critic/intellectual stalker stance. He acts like an asshole, and swears a lot, so he seems a mean bugger to be sure. But not a villian in any case. I suppose Cyrus would be the closest thing to a true villian in that story, and yet he might be doing what he thinks is best for his men due to his training and the state of the empire. I'd say in Endmaster's stories, that bloke who runs the Combine and Elliot from GZ were the closest to true villians, as it was their powerlust and hatred for the protagonist that made them commit their evils. And yeah, the raider path was a nice one, had a nice mad max feel. Done better in Groin Zero, if we're looking at the Apocalyptic Asshole character. Probably due to all the mutant rape. However, the mutant was more of an anti-hero, whereas GZ's wasteland savage was more of a fuck-everything-with-lead villian.

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12 years ago
Firstly, I'd be impressed if any newborns could kick a puppy ( take nots OP). Secondly, you don't seem to be reading my posts at all. The main reason I was pleased with Jedi's ending was that the puppetmaster got killed in an ironic matter. Vader stopped being the villian at that point, and became an anti-hero. That was the point at which it's, in my view, acceptable for him to stop acting like a villian. Because he stopped being one. But by your logic, up until the penultimate scene of film 6, he was a dull and uninteresting villian, and you didn't bother with one of the greatest film series ever made. He was a good villian because he was indestructable, relentless and cold. He forcechoked a guy because the death star construction was behind schedule. He imprisioned his own daughter, announced paternity to his son and then tried to murder him. He is willing to kill billions for control of the galaxy. He somehow managed to survive in a disabled spacecraft in enemy territory for who knows how long. He was a monster, and what would Star Wars be without him? He was not without depth. Only for the better half of the series, the depth wasn't riddled with angst and Jerry Springer moments.
And you'd be surprised. Granted, you probably know more about writing than me. But I'll wager I know more about cliches than the average user. The point of a hero/villian story is the fight between good and evil. Antiheroes shift that to neutrality/evil, or selfishly good/evil. The reason we're supposed to cheer for a hero is because they're good. And stories that have no distinct heroes or villians tend to opt for the gray-gray neutrality like you suggested all stories do.
The reason villians nowadays have empathy sellotaped to them is due to cognitive dissonance. Basically, we're given two contradicting facts, i.e. 'The villian killed an imperial fuck-tonne of people, therefore he's evil and we must hate him.' As well as 'The villian wanted money to buy orphans some food, therefore we must think he's a good man' obviously, the brain isn't a fan of having two logical statements, so it tries to mix them altogether to something that contradicts both sides equally. Like that the villian is doing evil things for a good reason. Cognitive dissonance is what convinced many germans that their jewish neighbours were sneaky and manipulative. But the point of a villian is to be evil. It's all well and good to have anti-heroes inducing dissonance, but like I've said, villians are evil, because it's what is required for the plot. Lets say Jason Vorhees never saw his mother killed, was never drowned as a kid, would he become any less of a villian? However, if he didn't brutally murder everyone, what would those films be like?

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12 years ago
That's what is my top idea for the moment.

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12 years ago

O.o what is your top idea?

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12 years ago
The villainous idea.

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12 years ago

I'd just like to start by saying I can't believe I'm debating over something like this, but why not, I haven't debated online in a long time. October or 3J might wanna move this to a seperate thread though.

"Firstly, I'd be impressed if any newborns could kick a puppy"

It's a joke used to express how rediculousyour standpoint is through oversimplification. Nothing more :)

"Secondly, you don't seem to be reading my posts at all. The main reason I was pleased with Jedi's ending was that the puppetmaster got killed in an ironic matter"

Actually, at this point I don't think you are reading your posts. When you explain the perfect villain as one who " The villian is the character who we're supposed to hate, have no empathy for",  and you further go on to say that "Heroes can only be as good as their enemies are bad." However, you later called Vader  "one of the greatest villians of all time" because "Literally, all he does is blow up planets and fuck shit up for the rebels", and yet he contradicts both your points because A.)  His sudden turn of heart at the end of the movie makes fans sympathyze with him because of his feelings for his son and his rejoining the light side, but because we are supposed to "have no empathy for" a "pure villain", he can't even be a good villain let alone one of the greatest villains of all time if we go by your judgings on villains and B.)  He didn't do it because he was pure evil, he did it because the Emporer was commanding him to. He doesn't just go around and does evil stuff for "his enjoyment", he does it because he has to. However, once the Emporer tries to kill his own son, he betrays him and throws him off of the railing. This would show that he's still good at heart and being evil doesn't bring him enjoyment, and so once again he wouldn't be a good villain by your standards, and C.) because a hero "can only be good as their enemies are bad", it would completely make the protagonist a bad protagonist after his change of heart. Because Vader was no longer bad, and still had a good person inside of him the whole time, it made the protagonist (Luke) bad due to the inverse relationship you established, so not only would Vader be a bad villain, but luke would be a bad protagonist as well due to your own logic.

Are you sure I'm the one who isn't reading your posts?

" But by your logic, up until the penultimate scene of film 6, he was a dull and uninteresting villian, and you didn't bother with one of the greatest film series ever made"

Actually, by my logic, the character would ahve to go through character development rather than be all bad all the time. The ending to the last movie would be more than enough for personal growth, let alone the prequel which was added FOR THE ENTIRE PURPOSE OF EXPLAINING THE ORIGINAL TRILOGY'S PLOT. So even though he wouldn't be a properly developed villian in my eyes, he wouldn't be a "dull and uninteresting villian", simply underdeveloped.

"He was a good villian because he was indestructable, relentless and cold. He forcechoked a guy because the death star construction was behind schedule. He imprisioned his own daughter, announced paternity to his son and then tried to murder him. He is willing to kill billions for control of the galaxy. He somehow managed to survive in a disabled spacecraft in enemy territory for who knows how long. He was a monster, and what would Star Wars be without him?"

Agreed on all but one count, the one where you say "He was a good villian because he was indestructable, relentless, and cold" I disagree with this for two reasons.

1.) That was not the reason he was a good villian. He was a good villian because of what he is willing to do for his cause, that much is true, but he is also a good villian because of his development. He was originally the chosen one, the one who would bring balance to the force (even though in the end the Dark Side had no more living Jedi, so it really depends on how you look at it), but after his mother was executed he was tempted to master the dark side in order to bring back his mother, which was the driving force behind the all the things in your paragraph of a quote.

2.) The fact that he was a monster. Although it can't be disputed that Star wars wouldn't be half the movie it is today without Vader, but Lucas's entire intention behind making Vader Luke's father, and having him betray the dark side to save his family was to show that even the most evil of people have good inside them. This would make him far from a monster, it would make him someone who values his family so much he would "Kill billions"

"And you'd be surprised. Granted, you probably know more about writing than me. But I'll wager I know more about cliches than the average user"

Thanks for the compliment, but don't get too cocky, now. If you said 'I know more about cliches than the average user because of my major in cinema studies' or something like that, I'd be tempted to believe you, but for now I'll just assume that you're just a teenager who sits in front of the television with his friends and says 'Dude, that's so cliched'. So basically, I don't think you're any better than me at this point, provide proof ;)

"The point of a hero/villian story is the fight between good and evil. Antiheroes shift that to neutrality/evil, or selfishly good/evil. The reason we're supposed to cheer for a hero is because they're good. And stories that have no distinct heroes or villians tend to opt for the gray-gray neutrality like you suggested all stories do."

A couple things:

1.)  No. NOt all points of hero/villain stories is a fight between good and evil. This is partially because I believe there is no clear good or evil and partially because heros will always arise in a story where protagonists are used, which is just about every story. The point of a story with a hero and villian is so that the protagonist (normally protrayed as the hero) needs to overcome adversity (often caused by the hero). Normally this will result in a fight between the two, but not always. Sure, you'll find stories like SindriVs where it's a group of superheros versus supervillians (no offense Sindri, both your heros and villians are superbly developed and you have great talent as a writer in a language that isn't even yuor first (I think) , but you will often come across stories like Endmaster's as well, where every protagonist and antagonist has different shades of gray depending on your path, and they all have different reasons why they act that way. Unfortunately, due to your definition of a good villian, you're saying Endmaster doesn't know how to craft  a proper villain.

2.) Actually, you cheer for a hero because they're the protagonist. I'd like to use the Necromancer as an example. The necromancer is not the "good guy" by any means whatsoever if you want to go by what normal stories use. In fact, he's the clear villain in the parallel story Death Song as well, but you don't think about that when you're playing as him. You think about how you want to take over other nations, and track down your nemesis (I don't remember his name),but you don't really remember that he's the evil one that's driving all life extinct throughout the story. The only reason you root for him is because he's the protagonist.

3.) When did I suggest that? I said that all characters should have development and reasons as to why they're "evil" or "good" , so their morality could be considered a gray area where the reader decides how good/evil they are, but I didn't say that all stories have nothing but nuetrality.

"The reason villians nowadays have empathy sellotaped to them is due to cognitive dissonance. Basically, we're given two contradicting facts, i.e. 'The villian killed an imperial fuck-tonne of people, therefore he's evil and we must hate him.' As well as 'The villian wanted money to buy orphans some food, therefore we must think he's a good man' obviously, the brain isn't a fan of having two logical statements, so it tries to mix them altogether to something that contradicts both sides equally. Like that the villian is doing evil things for a good reason."

True, and that's how it should be. I'll use Skryim as an example. On one side you have Ulfirc Stormcloak, who is fighting for independance from the Empire, but does so by putting unstable leaders in charge and promoting the superiority of one race. On the other side you have the Empire, they round up dissidants (<-- no idea how that should be spelled) and execute them to retain control, they refuse to give people liberty, and strip people of their freedom to worship to save their own skins, however they do so keep the Dominion out of Skryim and promote order. You now have two sides to choose from, each with contradicting viewpoints and each with obvious downsides. Now the reader - or player in this case - is free to support their favorite side based on what they have deduced to be the morally correct side rather than provide copy-and-paste heroes and villians that have no depth. Stories like that cause the easily impressionable to form premature moral beliefs, just ask the people who suggest we nuke everyone in the Middle East because they don't give America waht they want. They don't care about the moral implications because to them America is the good guy and the Middle East is the bad guy.

"Cognitive dissonance is what convinced many germans that their jewish neighbours were sneaky and manipulative"

Actually, what caused that was a charismatic leader and extremely troubled economic times coupled with peer pressure, promises of a new start, and a history rife with distrust with the Jews. Good job trying to pull the Hitler card though.

"But the point of a villian is to be evil. It's all well and good to have anti-heroes inducing dissonance, but like I've said, villians are evil, because it's what is required for the plot."

And here lies the reason that I've put off your anti-hero argument for so long. The anti-hero is obviously your scapegoat to hide behind while common sense bombards your argument as well as your opponents' logic. You saw the arguments being made about morally gray antagonists, and had a reaction soemthing along that I like to think went like this: 'Oh shit.... well, I guess I'll say they're right. with one argument... but I'll keep saying they're wrong at the same time with the same argument I've been using." Unfortunately, an anti-hero is, quite simply,  "A main character in a dramatic or narrative work who is characterized by a lack of traditional heroic qualities, such as idealism or courage." so your scapegoat isn't even correct. You're trying to typecast Vader as an anti-hero, when really he's just an antagonist taht has a morally gray area and so completely disproves your argument as even you yourself called him one of the greatest heros of all time. It's faulty grasp of temrs like that that makes me think you're not actually a cinema major after all :P

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12 years ago
Zing.

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(Anyone who thinks the best villains are those who we feel no empathy for is still watching cartoons)

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I have a tad of empathy for Hitler to be honest. Of course, I would have shot him square in the head were I somehow in the proper time and place. The only unfortunate part about killing Hitler, would be that he couldn't be killed again afterwards. Still, people are not evil for the sake of evil. Hitler had a rough life. In history the greatest heroes overcome tremendous obstacles and, as a result of those obstacles, become better. The shame of it is, Hitler was not strengthened by his obstacles, but twisted. That is the difference between the development of a great hero, and a horrific villain, their response to the hardships that made them who they are

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And his mother was a whore :) I love history class

But more seriously, I love your example. Htiler was definately morally warped somewhere along the line to believe in what he did, and the whole time he was doing it he thought he was doing the right thing by creating a new Germany and Aryan race.

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12 years ago
Was tempted to TL:DR this after a long day at work, but seeing as how you clearly made the effort.. Even if I was trying to watch Scott Pilgrim.
I'll save the star wars geek-off for after I'm warmed up. So I'll go to the jews for the moment. Well Hitler was a (to the germans) a charismatic man, that only gets you so far. It'd be easy for us to say that the afghans are all terrible people and deserved to be nuked, I, as a Brit, have never met an afghan, and if I were a little less skeptical, I might believe that they are as evil as everyone makes out. That'd just be plain old propaganda. But in Germany back in the 1930's, Jews weren't ellusive. They could be the neighbourhood doctor, the friendly old man next door, the shopkeeper, or your coworker. It's all very well saying people you've never met are evil, but people you've known for years? That's how cognitive dissonance build the sneaky, manipulative jew stereotype. After all, if the government ingrained anti-semitism into you, and yet you know them as the people who live peacefuly beside you, to avoid that dissonance, you say both facts are true, because the jews were trying to manipulate the whole time. I never specified that it was the reason behind the Holocaust, that was just you reading to much into it. And I wasn't playing the Hitler card, seeing as how Gobbels would be more to blame, my great-grandmother was a jewish refugee, and I researched it for my psychology project in school last year. I didn't even mention Hitler.
As with me trying to U-turn on my points on anti-heroicism, as I mentioned. Posting takes a long time on a semi-broken android phone. Even as I type the page seems to be wobbling all over the place trying to follow my typing. So you have to understand a post from me of the previous lengths takes a long time. If shit got mentioned that contradicted the next point I was to make, that'd be because I haven't seen the post. If however you are talking about you and Sindriv saying your villians should have emotional backstories and shit, that's completely different. Don't copy from the dictionary and say that proves a point, so you can hold a minor victory over semantics, that's the applied version of me doing that evil snigger from worms and saying 'you made a spelling mistake, so fuck you'.the fact is, Vader stops being a villian is wholly relevent. He's not a morally grey antagonist, or a marionette. He tries to kill his own son. And then we suddenly empathise with him because he gets angry when someone else tries to do it? He's still a complete cunt, and the fact that he rejoins the light side at the end is ridiculous. I don't even like t o think about that part. 'Oh, you murdered billions of people for some old douchebag? Tried to kill your own son after he refused to suck that old man's cock too? This old man transpiring to be the one who purged the Jedi order in the first place.. Oh, but you saw sense at the end? We are as brothers..' The fact of the matter is, if up until that point, and the part where he wants Luke to join him, he shows no mercy, and that according to you, would make him dull. Don't think your eloquence can make that dissappear.. He is throughout the old trilogy, a mass-murdering team-killing, asshole. Granted, at the end, there's some retrospective guilt and he somehow becomes a jedi again and my phone is too shit to show me any text past here, so new post,

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12 years ago

Vader tries to kill his son? If I remember correctly, the very first thing he did upon truly encountering him for the first time (they had seen one another, but the boss fight in Empire Strikes back was the first time they really interacted with one another. Unless you count the time Luke tried to shoot Vader after he killed Obi-Wan) was to try to convert him, to have him join his side, to make him his apprentice and kill the emperor with him. That qualifies as killing him? Upon their second encounter, in Return of the Jedi, on Endor, Vader didn't kill Luke, he took him to the emperor. There, the emperor tried to convert Luke, attempting to inspire anger in him, which succeeded and Luke attacked the emperor, where Vader defended his master (as was probably already planned). Vader didn't attack Luke, trying to kill him. He was shielding his master, causing Luke to strike out in anger without it resulting in the emperor's death. During the fight, Vader again tried to anger Luke, by threatening Leia, which worked, and in his anger, Luke cut off Vader's mechanical hand. The emperor then asks Luke to replace Vader's side and become his new apprentice, which Luke denies. THEN is the first time any sith actually attempts to kill Luke. Neither Vader nor the emperor had tried that before, they had just tried to make him one of them, and in that first attempt at his son's life, Vader defended him and killed the emperor. Name me ONE other moment where Vader made any indication that Luke's death was part of his intentions?

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12 years ago

While I agree with you, the line: "He will join us, or die" comes to mind.

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12 years ago

Although this is just my feeling, I think, as a sith lord, he was sort of in denial of the fact that there's someone he doesn't give a shit about, so I suspect the "he will join us or die" is him trying to convince himself, if that makes sense (such as where he blatantly refused when Luke claimed to be able to sense good in him, whereas I think he knew he was right, and denied it to himself).

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12 years ago
If you meant, " He was sort of in denial of the fact that there was someone he does give a shit about." Then ya I agree with you. I also feel like he was adding that last part to reassure his master that his loyalties were to him, and not his son.

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12 years ago

Yes, that's exactly what I meant.

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12 years ago
I was actually about to create a concise version of what I thought I had already put across, then I saw the part where you were being an asshat. There's a debate and there's being a cunt. You're more eloquent than me, congratulations. That doesn't mean you're right. Spare me your psychoanalysis. I don't presume to know anything about you, and you're probably going sit there reading this as 'BAWW HE GUESSED ME TO T'. Do what you like mate, you're known for exactly this thing on this forums. Like the scourge of anyone who disagrees with you on the forums. I salute you sir.
But to be honest, I couldn't give n>1 number of shits about all this. You proved to be the winner of a debate by boring your opponent and nitpicking. A great day. And yet, you haven't actually persuaded me on any matter other than I was using words in the wrong context. A great victory no less though, you can masturbate at the thought of destroying another man.
TLDR I'm nearly on the scene with the lesbian evil ex. And am in no mood to comment on this. Just chalk it up as an even more resounding Bo win than it was already turning out to be.

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12 years ago
That last part didn't sense till I remembered what you were watching.

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12 years ago

Being eloquent doesn't make him right, but does it make him wrong? I'd say you're the one that's not debating properly.

He won by being boring and nitpicking? He won by bringing his point across, and by not asking the other member of the debate to masturbate.

Bo is known for this in the forums? By who? He often brings in a fair point in debates if that's what you're asking.

He hasn't persuaded you on any other matter than you were using words in the wrong context? Eehhh...who did you persuade? Who agrees with you that villains should have nothing more to them than "evilness"? I'd say more people agree with Bo than you. I know I do.

I'm starting to lean towards this being a troll post.

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12 years ago

Ah, the old: "despite spending a lot of time writing replies in our debate, I really didn't care" defence.

If you really didn't care you would have just stopped posting, and if you think Bo was being an asshat, then you're being overly sensitive.

Also, it's in your best interest not to assume that what you think the other person is thinking is what they're actually thinking, because odds are it's not.

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12 years ago
OKAY GUYS, HERE'S THE DECISION TIME (FOR THE TOPIC):

1. BEING A VILLAIN.

2. DETECTIVE STORY.

3. GOD FOR A WEEK.

4. MULTIDIMENSIONAL CRAP (ANYTHING GOES).

NO HONORABLE MENTIONS.

NOW, YOU GUYS CAN BICKER ABOUT WHICH ONE SHOULD I DO ON TOP OF ALL OTHERS.

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12 years ago

Do two at once, become god like for a week, and use your powers to be the ultimate villain. Then have a god  like hero step forward to oppose you. 

 

 

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12 years ago

What, you didn't go with the lawyer on a bus story? I put a lot of work into that one, too :P

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12 years ago
A movie with a similar plot exists. It was on the theaters, but I forgot the name.

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12 years ago

My internet is being really slow right now, so sorry if I'm posting a bit late. Also, as an advance warning, I'm in a pretty good mood right now so my arguments might be a bit more jovial than they normally would

Due to my opponent's technical difficulties, I'll be taking arguments from both posts and puttting them into one.

"Was tempted to TL:DR this after a long day at work, but seeing as how you clearly made the effort.. Even if I was trying to watch Scott Pilgrim."

Even though you just posted a large rant post about how this is bad for you or you don't like it, or however you want to phrase it, this is the only bit of your typing that made me feel remotely guilty: That I'm delaying you from watching Scott Pilgrim. Then of course I realized that you willingly didn't watch Scott Pilgrim in order to debate me, so my guiltiness turned to being flattered.

"Well Hitler was a (to the germans) a charismatic man, that only gets you so far."

Actually, he's known as one of the most charismatic men of all time. He had a raging passion, masterful body language (ironically enough taught to him by a Jew) , and a throat that was banged up by WWI poison gas that backfired,which made his voice sound rich and enchanting. He was so charismatic in his native tounge that to Germans, his words were absolutely true... untill he started talking about th emass extinction of teh Jews, that's when people started questioning it on a large scale.

"It'd be easy for us to say that the afghans are all terrible people and deserved to be nuked, I, as a Brit, have never met an afghan, and if I were a little less skeptical, I might believe that they are as evil as everyone makes out. That'd just be plain old propaganda. "

Thank you for confirming my point, I guess?

"But in Germany back in the 1930's, Jews weren't ellusive. They could be the neighbourhood doctor, the friendly old man next door, the shopkeeper, or your coworker. It's all very well saying people you've never met are evil, but people you've known for years? That's how cognitive dissonance build the sneaky, manipulative jew stereotype. After all, if the government ingrained anti-semitism into you, and yet you know them as the people who live peacefuly beside you, to avoid that dissonance, you say both facts are true, because the jews were trying to manipulate the whole time"

I'd like to counter this argument with a quote of my own. "and a history rife with distrust with the Jews" If you notice, throughout European history (Mostly Eastern Europe), Jews are prosecuted... a lot. When this becomes part of your culture, your naturally anti-semitic, like a guy who grows up around racist parents will likely grow up to be racist. WHen you're already anti-semitic, it doesn't take much for you to say the Jews are evil. Don't get me wrong, I'm not saying that all Germans are anti-semitic, but racism, sexism, and anti-semitism do spring up during economic turmoil, so It's not much to assume that it would be on a larger scale than it is today.

Plus I'd liek to point out that if the government already ingrained anti-semitism into you, you wouldn't have cognitive dissonance.... because it's ingrained :)

"I  never specified that it was the reason behind the Holocaust, that was just you reading to much into it. And I wasn't playing the Hitler card, seeing as how Gobbels would be more to blame, my great-grandmother was a jewish refugee, and I researched it for my psychology project in school last year. I didn't even mention Hitler."

That's genuinely my bad, I didn't even think abuot the fact that you might not know what the Hitler card is. Using the Hitler card isn't actually dropping his name, it's saying that your opponent is similar to the Nazis or saying you're different than the Nazis because of an unrelated reason in order to turn the popular support to your side. Things like "He's trying to raise taxes, just like the Nazis." Or "He's trying to have more control of big business, like the Nazis". You used to see that a lot on Fox before Glenn Beck lost his talk show, and they still throw it around every now and again.

"Posting takes a long time on a semi-broken android phone. Even as I type the page seems to be wobbling all over the place trying to follow my typing. So you have to understand a post from me of the previous lengths takes a long time. If shit got mentioned that contradicted the next point I was to make, that'd be because I haven't seen the post. If however you are talking about you and Sindriv saying your villians should have emotional backstories and shit, that's completely different. Don't copy from the dictionary and say that proves a point, so you can hold a minor victory over semantics, that's the applied version of me doing that evil snigger from worms and saying 'you made a spelling mistake, so fuck you'."

Althoughmy heart goes out to your phone, I'm afraid you're just being childish. What you did was defend yourself by saying Vader was an anti-hero, not a villian, and I said that by the DEFINITION OF THE WORD (caps for emphasis, not yelling) he wasn't. That's not calling you wrong for a spelling mistake (although I did do that on a debate round once when I realized I lost, that was fun), it's just proving you're wrong and showing that the character who you think is one of the greatest villains ever is actually what you said made a character shitty.

What you're doing right now, is just seeing your point being a desproven and saying "yeah, well you're a doo-doo head (tee-hee)"

"the fact is, Vader stops being a villian is wholly relevent"

I'm afraid I don't know what you're trying to say there. I've honestly tried, and I just don't know, so I'll move on.

"He's not a morally grey antagonist, or a marionette. He tries to kill his own son. And then we suddenly empathise with him because he gets angry when someone else tries to do it? He's still a complete cunt, and the fact that he rejoins the light side at the end is ridiculous. I don't even like t o think about that part. 'Oh, you murdered billions of people for some old douchebag? Tried to kill your own son after he refused to suck that old man's cock too? This old man transpiring to be the one who purged the Jedi order in the first place.. Oh, but you saw sense at the end? We are as brothers..' "

Umm... a few things

1.) You're obviously angry, when you can tell this is happening, take a step back from the keyboard, take a brake, and, I dunno, play frisbee with the dog or something untill you calm down. It'll save you some embarrasment

2.) Vulgarity asside, the fact that you don't want to think about somethign doesn't mean it's not happening. I'm not saying that I cried when Vader died, I'm saying that moment where you see he has some good in him makes the audience think, well, that he has some good in him. That moment where you see he has the same values, even for a short while, as the people you're rooting for would make him relatable to the watchers, and so he would then - using your own requirements - become a horrible villain.

3.) When did he try to kill his son, again? Sure he cut his hand off, but his motivation was convert, not kill.

"The fact of the matter is, if up until that point, and the part where he wants Luke to join him, he shows no mercy, and that according to you, would make him dull. Don't think your eloquence can make that dissappear.. He is throughout the old trilogy, a mass-murdering team-killing, asshole. Granted, at the end, there's some retrospective guilt and he somehow becomes a jedi again"

1.) You're argument here is 'Well, except for the parts where he's not, he's the perfect person!', which is rediculous

2.) You still don't even know what my argument is about. I'm not saying that villains shouldn't be evil, I'm saying they require a certain depth that your description utterly lacks. That's where the argument comes from.

3.) Oh no, my eloquence doesn't make that "dissapear" at all, (thanks for the compliment, though). However, my sound arguments, logic you can't refute, and use of examples do actually counter that argument.

"I was actually about to create a concise version of what I thought I had already put across, then I saw the part where you were being an asshat."

Haha, right, nobody buys it dude. From the comments ont he thread, I'm gonna guess that they see you didn't have a miracle argument that completely disproved everything I said, and youa ctually just realized you were wrong.

"a debate and there's being a cunt."

I agree with you completely. And I believe that point is where you stop actually debating and where you use entire posts to insult your opponent using rampant vulgarity.

"You're more eloquent than me, congratulations. That doesn't mean you're right. Spare me your psychoanalysis. I don't presume to know anything about you, and you're probably going sit there reading this as 'BAWW HE GUESSED ME TO T'."

Once again, thank you for the compliment, but I don't use my writing itself to prove I'm write, I use my logic, which you're not able to refute. The "eloquent" writing, if I even write that way, simply comes from experience. I'd also like to paraphrase Killa when I tell you not to guess what your opponent is thinking (even though I can only guess what your point is in that, it wasn't exactly written well) because it ultimately makes you look like a douche. This also links to what I told you when I said to just walk away from the keyboard when you feel angry because it makes you look like - to use your own words - an "asshat"

"Do what you like mate, you're known for exactly this thing on this forums. Like the scourge of anyone who disagrees with you on the forums. I salute you sir."

I'll use the public opinion that's being posted in reply to this as my argument against it.

"But to be honest, I couldn't give n>1 number of shits about all this. You proved to be the winner of a debate by boring your opponent and nitpicking. A great day. And yet, you haven't actually persuaded me on any matter other than I was using words in the wrong context"

1.) Ahh, the classic 'I started this debate and spent so much time on it [especially the fact taht you were on a broken phone to do it] but I don't actually care' argument, I was wondering when I would see that pop up. You see, this happens whenever  an immature opponent realizes he/she lost and gets angry, and then gets the urge to make people think they don't care to save their own dignity. The people here have seen it enough times to see through it.

2.) My goal wasn't to persuade you at all, it was to defend my own beliefs. If you look at the actual thread, You gave your opinion, Endmaster and I gave our opinions, and then you posted two long posts saying we were wrong for thinking that way, that's what started the debate. I've long given up on debating people online simply from the point of persuasion simply because if that person believes in something enough to talk about it, it will take a lot more than black letters on a white background in a faceless environment to persuade them otherwise.

In short, you started this, so stop whining after you lost. You brought it on yourself.

A great victory no less though, you can masturbate at the thought of destroying another man.
TLDR I'm nearly on the scene with the lesbian evil ex. And am in no mood to comment on this. Just chalk it up as an even more resounding Bo win than it was already turning out to be."

1.) I don't need you to tell me I won this debate. Your arguments and attitude already confirmed that for me.

2.)  What does TLDR mean? If I know that abbvreviation, I forgot it.

3.) If you weren't in the mood for this, you wouldn't spend all this time over it.

4.) I'm a bit disturbed that your mind went immediately from thinking about me to masturbating....

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12 years ago

*sigh*, so many errors in that post. I quoted him and left out half the quote. Also, I typed "believe it enough to talk about it" or something like that near the end, but I meant to type "believe it enough to debate over it"

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12 years ago

TLDR is actually TL;DR, which stands for: Too Long; Didn't Read.

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12 years ago

Oh, thanks.

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12 years ago

I JUST realized that not many people have done a desert setting. I'm going with that.

So far we have:

1. Something of an anti-hero or something like that.

2. Desert world.

3. (Plot?)

After this, uuuuh, I guess I'll start writing. Since vampires and werewolves got popular in my head(as well as zombies), I'm gonna do a background plot of a 5-8 sided war for control over oases. I'm not sure who will be the extra 4 factions, but you guys get to decide that. After all, this is a choose-your-own story.

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12 years ago

Factions:

Vampires:  Have technology about a thousand years ahead of humans.  Can use ALL technology.  Can turn humans into Vampires or Familiars (Fams can't consume any blood.  Not even blood sausage.  Fams CAN walk in sunlight for a couple of hours before overheating.  Fams also have to stay within a certain range of their owners, and have a "Force Control" system in them, so if a Fam rebels, ouch.  Vamps are made by surviving a blood draw.  Fams are made from a special toxin found in about a quarter of the Vamp population, but only a few can utilize it.)  Vamps don't burn in the sun, but they are easily overheated, so the blood they need cools them AND supplies the superhuman strength needed for combat.  Otherwise, they can be equivalent to a NORMAL PERSON.  Vamps need to draw blood once a month.  As of yet, there is no cure.

Werewolves:  Have technology 400 years behind humans, but can still operate human and Werewolf techonology.  Can turn humans into Werewolves.  Lycans (In my universe, they are a momentarily recessive strain of lycanthropy.) are harder to control, but are apex predators, meaning they can and WILL kill off any higher ranking opponents/allies.  Werewolves are powerful, able to take on from a single Vamp to about 20 Fams.  They are less plentiful than most Factions.

Humans:  The start of any Faction.  They have their own technology, and they can utilize Vamp, WereW, and Human technology.  Most numerous of all factions, but weakest.  Some individuals get special ranks and training (The infamous Bio-weapon heroes, Supersoldiers, things that are science fiction.)  Can eat ANYTHING.

Zombies:  Incredibly small faction with next to no technology.  However, some possess enough intellect to become a Sheperd.  Sheperds can use crude contraptions to their liking (Like basic traps, bait for their hordes, basic body armor, etc.).  Sheperds lead their hordes, so formations are usually some Sheperds standing in front of a potentially cannibalistic horde.  Can only eat flesh.  A bite is the quickest way to turn, although splattered blood and open wounds can also be possibility.  Tougher than humans, weaker than Vamps or WereW's.

When voting, just say one of the following, don't argue becuase that's gonna screw it up.  Don't take it back, be sure if you want the faction to be included.  Based on Vote, four more Factions are to be available out of these:

1. Mutants.

2. Aliens (think as openly as Star Wars. So any kind might be added.)

3. Other Humans

4. Alliance Between all Factions.

5. Rebel humans.

6. Zombie mutant hybrid.  Yes, it's probably gonna be OverPowered.

7. Other hybrids.

8. The Protagonists.

 

Voting for where our Anti-hero is going to be will happen LATER!  LATER! 

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12 years ago

So you want us to vote? I'm not sure Hybrids should be their own factions, but rather, anamolies (think the wherewolf/vampire guy in Underworld, who is the only hybrid).

Anyway, I'd vote for Mutants or aliens. Both are very open factions and can include virtually anything (the mutants could be mindless monsters or hyper-intelligent mind infiltrators. The aliens could be reptile-like stealthy ninjas to small insects that possess other people's bodies to walking trees), so if you include either one of those, you should be careful to define how those factions are very early on (define the kind of mutations the mutants suffer, or what kind of aliens the aliens are etc.)

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12 years ago

Okay.  I'm guessing Hybrids would be an incredibly small, yet incredibly powerful faction.  I still haven't decided what are the mixes, but after the voting, I'll try to work them out.  I COULD do an anomaly, but it would be very confusing, because on top of the chaos of 8 factions wiping each other out, adding small, powerful individuals would change MANY ideas I have in mind.

For the Mutants, I've decided to make them a hominid-type.  I'll be calling them Empyreans.  They aren't the ugly ones, but they aren't gods either.  If you read The Roar or The Whisper (Which besides the anit-greed/eco-friendly message stated throughout the plot), the mutants presented there are what I'm basing them on, they are VERY interesting.  In other words, they are the oddities and pride of the old human race.

For aliens, I have no idea what I'm basing them on, partially because half of the media likes humanoid aliens and the other half likes million-limbed aliens.  At most, I will make them a species not native to Earth, but have adapted to its conditions for millions of years.  (It's very confusing, because one could easily say "Doesn't that make us possibly aliens since we MIGHT have come from a supposed alien slug from the ocean? [And scenarios similar to that.]").  Don't talk about the aliens in this thread, otherwise this thread will be derailed.

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12 years ago

The factions are still open.  None of the spaces have been taken.  I'm just throwing out ideas that you might want.

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12 years ago

BY THE WAY, WE HAVE NOT CHOOSED A PLOT YET.  THIS A HUGE TEXTED MESSAGE JUST TO GRAB YOUR ATTENTION. 

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12 years ago
I'm chooseding to ignore you, but it's becoming much more difficult. You're infuriating.

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12 years ago

Okay.

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12 years ago

Why don't you just make your own story? Don't ask for ideas from other people or you won't feel any motivation.

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12 years ago

I have a hard time composing things in my head, so I just want to find what people want to view, then, I can have make a story tailored to the audiences needs.

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12 years ago
Backwards. Great creation comes from inner inspiration not from meeting the perceived demands of a faceless audience.

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12 years ago

Point taken, but I will continue to persist.  If you don't like what I'm doing, then don't visit this thread anymore.

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12 years ago

I'll do you one better: If I don't like what you're doing, I'll rate your story low as it's not actually YOUR story. I doubt you'll finish it in the first place since you have no inspiration/motivation this way, but my vote will still be low.

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12 years ago

Have you gathered any useful ideas from this yet?

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12 years ago
If it's TLDR, then all I can say is:

"I have a desert world (from unknown reasons) with 8 factions. So far, I have the classic Vampires, Werewolves, and Zombies. Don't forget the humans. The factions/races are all dependent on Humans, so the anti-hero will MOST likely be not human. The main character will be an anti-hero (much like EndMaster's Necromancer) and that's about it."

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12 years ago

This sounds nice... how bout making the main character someone who was forced to take part in a genetic experiment and it failed turning him into a freak/mutant/whatever the hell it is?

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12 years ago

Endmaster's Necromancer was villian, not an anti-hero.

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12 years ago

*was A villian

lol

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12 years ago
K fine.