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This is a really spontaneous thing here. I love it. I've been working on mine off and on all day. Who else is submitting one?

I am going to try thats for sure dunno if i will have time

Man, you've just gotta pump that crap out. Even if it doesn't win have fun doing it. That's what I finally learned. You have to just enjoy writing. If you start the project just to see it done, you won't get it done. You have to write for writing's sake. At least I have to. Enjoy what you do.

lol well writing for writings sake lets see,

7 incomplete editorials, An unfinished draft for an architect on how stupid he is and why his design will not work for a music hall unless he follows my advice, (incompetent F***), 3 poems, a book, 4 short stories, and a story game for this website.


ok the writing is done, now i have to read a 30 page transcript on why this aforementioned drone wants his design to be this certain way and what he has permits and coding for, then I have to correct the rest of that BS So I can get a paycheck. lol

.... So ya I could fit it in sometime in between that :)

Well, God speed bud.

I just hope there are enough entries for the contest to count.

I just naturally have trouble adhereing to the iambic pentameter

Must of my poems are more, bizarre and abstract, I write like Poe.

Sometimes I find myself wanting to throw in the 11 syllable alternative, Shakespeare did this from time to time, but I don't know if Madglee will accept it. There are some things that are okay to do, but strictly speaking you can't. There is more than one type of sonnet for instance. I'm assuming he meant the Elizabethan sonnet.

I really like the structure of sonnets. It takes artistic dexterity to work inside the parameters of iambic pentameter. Which isn't to speak badly of anyone who doesn't like it. That would be non-sense. There are plenty of other feats of artistic prowess, as noted. Poe was a great poet, and everyone ought to know it. 

At any rate, if we get enough participation, a good time should be had by all. 

Ok I finished mine

I actually would liek for you to read it and tell me what you think

Ok i submitted mine, waiting to see approval of it I guess

Ugi I sent it to you as well to see what ya thought lol

"3) Must also include a romantic interest, male, female, neutral, or otherwise. Romantic interest is not necessarily sex or love."

With a horror theme....

Show of hands, how many people will be including "traps"?

No mine is a love story.

iambic pentameter included 14 lines

BUT with a Poe twist in structure and grammatical coherence

I'm trying, but I'll probably fail.

Never made a coherent poem in my life lol.

First quatrain done, like a boss.

just google something Im sure there are plenty on the web to get inspiration from. or if you are an experienced writer just free form it and then edit afterwards

Yeah, I had to look up how to actually do one haha.

Though I ended up making it a tetrameter rather than a pentameter (it felt more natural with four).

ya thats usually how I write a poem or i include that weird 2 line break  then go back to what i was doing

Are conjunctions fine to have in poems?

I always say no as a poem is - to me- formal

Gotcha, done then.

but that's just my honest opinion I think if you can get away with the rhyme scheme then you should be fine but I shied away from it

The conjunctions are there to fit in more words haha. Without the two conjunctions it'd be the wrong length, but I found an alternative line I like anyway.

Can't, Won't, and You'll are no nos in my opinion. However, some contractions sound to me more elegant than their unreduced form. 

Let's and he's are the ones I used I think.

I find "Let us" to be much more elegant than let's (Despite the fact that it sounds like the word lettuce)

Yeah, it felt weird to begin with, which is why I asked. I later rewrote the last line.

Certain contractions set a tone. Let's gives a more youthful energy to me, but Let us gives off an air of sophistication and elegance.

Here, I'll try to make an example.

"Let us fly on the feathered wings of kings

Let us reach out and touch the starry heaven

Let us see, eyes open for what life brings

Let me see, once gone, my life's impression."
 

Compare that against this.
 

"Let's run in the fields and over the hills

Let's Roam in woods to find our treasure,

Let's turn every stone to find all the thrills

Let's gain from life every single pleasure."

Not the best, but I hope you see what I'm talking about. 'Let us' would not have felt right in the second poem, instead, in my opinion at any rate, 'let's give the piece a nice touch, whereas in the first poem 'let us' is an integral part of setting the tone.

"let's" just seems... childish? or immature to me in comparison

Not that I am Milton or Twain Or Shakespeare for that matter just saying

You say childish like it's a bad thing. HAha, maybe that is just the feeling the author is trying to give. (The author in this case is me.)

Cheeky then ;)

Ah, sorry if that come off rude. 

absolutely not read my responses

sorry if I came off rude, wasn't my intention

It didn't. We're cool. Curse text and its inability to portray human emotions.

Everyone sees things differently.

NOOO Childish is a thing that A LOT of writers skimp on. That playful energy is amazing when it is portrayed properly in text

"to see through a child's eyes" Is something we all try to do and rarely achieve, society and time calluses us and steals our youth. Every writer should play a child once or twice in their stories

Here, here! I heard it said once, "The creative adult is the child who survived."

absolutely! I liek that, I do believe that's an instant facebook status

Guys check the thread. I had to clarify exactly what I mean by "sonnet," fool that I am.

Oh good, that's the way I did it haha.

Well, I did 8 syllables each line...

Yours is good, but yes, should be 10 syllables per line, 14 lines, abab cdcd efef gg. See the thread, it explains. Totally my fault for not clarifying and I apologize for messing up the first contest I've run.

the thread seems to have... vanished?

Moved to News & Updates Forum...

This is fun - I can't wait to see what everyone did haha!  ^v^

You do one?

Yep. I slapped one together last night after seeing the thread. It would make a Shakespearean bard spin in his grave, but I had to at least give it a whirl  ;)

I'm curious who will win. No idea who here is able to actually write good sonnets lol.

ok ok I re wrote mine since my Poe sonnet wasn't structured right my new submission is in

Working on one. 

galobtter pointed out that Iambic Pentameter also requires the rhythm to be daDUM daDUM for the syllables. That's definitely true and he is right. However, for the purpose of this mini-contest, I didn't mention that because it's just too much of a pain in the ass.

As long as you have 14 lines with 10 syllables each, and meet the other requirements, you're good to go.

I'm gonna see if I can write it tomorrow or some other time.

Show of hands who has actually turned one in, with the new revised standard?

Nope lol.

As it stands I'm pretty sure mine is disqualified.

ahh but wern't you really excited about yours? 

I hope it gets sent in, is Mad going to be just showing the winner? or show all entries? I am really interested to read what everyone came up with

I imagine he'll show everyone's (probably in the order he liked them).

I was excited about it, but I can't rewrite it in the proper format, so I'm fine with leaving it as is.

ahh i gotcha

You gonna try to write another? or just leave it as is

Leave it as it is.

Anyone who's cool with it can send me a message. My plan was to show first, second, and third. But if you want yours to be read, as this is so subjective, feel free to send me a PM and I would be glad to post it and comment.

1st, 2nd, 3rd, and 'Dishonorable Mention' work for me haha!   ^-^

I'm for this as well

Me too

yep im with it as well

will there be a consolation prize? maybe like 10 points or something lol?

I suppose we'll just see how generous I am feeling.

EDIT: DONE!!!!

Of course, I am going to see whether i can make it better, but I have a version.

Wil be starting mine after I get home from dive practice today :)

Turns out I have work today and tomorrow so -just my luck- I'll likely be working on it Wednesday since it's my only offday this week so far :P

Mine is officially finished! :D

yeeeeeah I don't think I'm gonna do it. I'm lazy.

You are also too lazy to update your profile...17 to 18....

God damn it, why do I always use … so much.  See? I used it now...And again.

Well, just finished mine. I'll likely get the dishonorable mention, but whatever. :P

LOL :) Stache it up bud.

DONE MINE!!!!

YAY !!!

Personally, I would like to see everyone's, including first, second and third.

Also this is my first forum post here in like, 11 months. Hello everyone.

Hi!!

I suck at sonnets so I probably won't be posting mine because when I finally finish it will be to embarrassing.

Welcome back! 

Hello.

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Glad to see you again  =)

reminder bump to get your entries in tonight

Good to see you! Don't be a stranger.

Hello! And ugi isn't really an emo kid, he's just going through a phase right now...

Now he's turned all Asian and stuff haha!