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The Nautilus Crown

10 years ago

Experience the vast kingdom of Nautilus, from a slave perspective.

Yes, you're a slave, but don't be immediately discouraged.  If you use your opportunities wisely, you'll be more than a slave when you're done.  Battle everything from wolves to sorcerers in your quest through the Nautilus feudal system, or underground resistance, or perhaps somewhere in between. 

The story will branch off immediately into several different directions, but will allow you to revert to different paths and interact with several figures in different manners.  Play as a charismatic leader, or a murderous psychopath to make your way up the ladder, but it won't be easy.

Don't be fooled by the Advanced settings, no items are included in this game as of now, but variables will influence your path greatly.

The Nautilus Crown

10 years ago

It WOULD be nice if someone could proofread what I have so far.

The Nautilus Crown

10 years ago

For that fight with the hooded figure, I think you should make the fight a little longer.  For a guy who could catch an arrow inches from his face, it was extremely easy to defeat him.

The Nautilus Crown

10 years ago

Well I didn't mean for the first fight to be that hard... maybe I'll take out the bit about him catching the arrow and save that move for a different enemy.