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Hello, people and residents of CYS. I am Throaty, your newfound writer and roleplayer! I have been here in this account for, hmm....a couple weeks, perhaps? My actual time here has been over a year now, and I am so grateful that I got the feedback and writing know-how to write a book. Now, I am going to post sections of a book I am writing. I will have to think of a good topic, and I will host a little idea "brainstorm room," as my friend calls it, and I will gather votes as the book topic. The title will be decided by me, so you don't have to help me all the way through. Correct my grammar by replying to THIS POST ONLY, which will all make sense later. All of my book posts will also be threaded to this, so I may edit my book freely. I will take all feedback seriously. Don't underestimate the power of writing.

Now, who wants to get started?

I am going to tag a few masterminds in this for help.

@EndMaster, for your great detailing
@Kiel_Farren, for your grammar and language
@AngelOfThatThing, for your inspiration
@BradinDvorak, for your smarts
and @TacocaT

For fuck's sake, stop calling yourself "throaty". Have you even been on the internet before?

Don't be mean SenPen! You shouldn't just assume that people are naive... Maybe her secret dream is to become an oral porn star ^_^

Lol.

Anyway Miss Throat, your tags didn't work because you put a comma immediately after all the names. (Well except Taco's)

That's Mistress Throaty to you! Don't make her get the paddle out. ^_^

Is her secret dream to become an oral porn star or a dominatrix? (Kidding about this)

Why can't she be both?

Good point.

Don't post large sections of your novel on the internet. Assuming its solid enough to be published then it probably wouldn't be a good thing that a large portion of it is online anyway.

Or maybe you're just writing solely fun and if so never-mind haha.

1st Chapter (Do not reply)

I wake up, my eyes foggy and I slide out of bed. I look in the mirror. My pink hair is a giant pouf atop my head. I sigh and continue walking to my dresser.

I open the first drawer and find that there is nothing there. I tilt my head in curiosity and open the next drawers that follow, coming up empty.

Enraged, and still in my nightgown, I open my door and find a trash bag labeled "Throw Out." Ugh! All of my clothes still freaking fit!

I grab the bag, tear it open and close the door behind me as I dump the contents of the bag onto my bedroom floor.

All I see are bugs.

Startled, I awake in my bed in a cold sweat, realizing that it was all just a dream, another tireless world of my imagination. I feel my hair and sigh, relieved that my hair is perfectly fine.

The smell of breakfast wafts into my nose, tempting me to go downstairs. I leave my room an step downstairs. Bacon is on a plate, two eggs in the process of cooking are on the stove. My parents are nowhere to be found, and I'm starting to panic.

I look out the window, and it seems as if we miraculously moved to Kansas, a state where my mother was dying to go to. They'd been arguing about that for months now, and I bet that they'd divorced.

I look in my parent's room, finding empty bedsheets and a note taped to the door: "I'll be back in a second with your father. Love, Mom."

I open the door, finding the doorstep shining with blood. I walk down two steps and find the mangled body of my brother, Abe. I scream and walk down the remaining steps with shaking legs.

On the last step is my father, and the one on the street, my mother.

Is this another dream-world? I have to be taking those pills. Did I forget?!?

@Briar_Rose

I    think I got it. Any suggestions?

Is that the whole first chapter? Sorry, just double checking, is this the first chapter to a story game or a book? 'Cos if it's a book, that's going to take up a quarter of a page at most.

Still working on it.

Oh okay. For awhile I thought it was going to be a very short book. 

Oh, Briar xD

You know I'm not the type for that.