I need help to add more to my story can someone read mine and give me ideas?
Put it on top some rice and wrap it in seaweed. Get that spam musubi boiiii...
Proofreading. Lots of it. I can't see your story (is it on sneakpeek?) but take another look at the description:
"just a game were you go on a camping trip. there are many ways to die that are just stupid so don't get mad if you die just go back.your goal is to survive camp beaver falls (there are no beavers so don't ask) there are three ways to win officially there is a minor win a major win and a total win! se if you can find them all! but I won't spoil it! have fun reading! it's a amazing story with quick pages and "
Please note the lack of capitals, bad grammar, and annoying asides to the reader.
Try something simpler and to the point: "You go on a camping trip, but soon realize you might never make it back. Danger is around every turn at Camp Beaver Falls! Do you have what it takes to survive?"
No one really needs to know how easy it is to die (there is a difficulty rating) and no one is going to try to find all the endings unless they like the game.
Programs like Grammarly can help you, but make an effort to punctuate properly the first time around. Also, if you go to the Help & Info section you can scroll down to the "storywriting" section and find many articles that will help. Read them all.
If you can see a storygame on someone's profile, it is on sneak peak. Note that some special characters need to be substituted in when trying to get to the game. In this case, the link is: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/A%20camping%20trip~21%20(gone%20wrong) because the exclamation point is a special character.
This is why it is nice when people give you the link, so you don't have to make it yourself.
Alternatively, last I checked, the site extension will replace the title for sneak preview stories with their links, so that you can just click them as normal.
yes it is