GMB13carat, The Wordsmith
With plenty of Vitamin A.
If you play the online game Agar.io, here's a parody-ish story game for you. Not meant to be taken seriously.
If you don't, Agar.io is an online game where you play as a blob. You can choose your name. You try to eat other players and collect pellets to grow as big as you can. Try it out: agar.io
There are seven different endings. Each of them is given a score out of 8. One of them is 8/8, but it isn't the best. That one is the secret ending.
Tell me what you think! For more agar.io stuff, visit reddit.com/r/agario.
Every single piece of media ever, in one fanfic. Just kidding. But a lot of fanfic.
You are a petty thief in the kingdom of Karltmor. Your repetitive actions have led to your exile.
You are given a Griffin to lead you out of the kingdom. He is an unnamed and untamed animal; abused all his life.
Once you discover your close bond with each other, you are the first to discover a dangerous power that could threaten to destroy Karltmor forever. The question is: do you work against it… or beside it?
Me, trying to make a story game in 90 minutes. Here we go.
This is a very short story about a kid who has given up and decides to pop a pill. Odd and meaningless things ensue. This game has very few pages, but try to read them all.
Also, don't bother trying to win. You don't win. You are just along for the ride. There are some endings that could be considered better than others, but everything in this game is really what you make of it.
This is also an experiment to see how good a game can be with a super short length. If it sucks, let me know, but also let me know if you liked it. I am accepting of all criticism, and I'd like to see what you guys think. :)
You, like, totally have a crush on this person, and like, they're mega-hot. You should, like, totally date. Follow me on Snapchat, kik, Instagram and LinkedIn... not Facebook, though, only old fogey use Facebook. Like, good luck with your dating adventure.
?Suddenly you wake up from the land of bad comments and discover a comment from a person who had a lot of fun reading this story, and thinks that it is a great guide to new writers and has even learnt a thing or two himself about character. Therefore rating the game 6/8."
A spiritual sequel to Will11's The Land of Bad Writing (go check it out!), this story game is set within the Land of Bad Comments. Luckily, we'll never run out of those.
Recent PostsGMB13carat's Motivational Thread on 5/20/2016 5:34:52 PM
What do you all think?
"Super Popular" I'm kind of iffy about... it's just not that strong an idea. But I'm conflicted.
I'm thinking of just publishing Year One of Elidread for the contest. Here's a sample page:
Will is on a train.
He has snuck onto the Ceuron Tram after running away from his small-minded hometown of Berwyn in a desperate search for change.
“Change” is a simple six-letter word of which Willoughby R. Martins has desperately sought for ten years; ten arduous years of intellectual suffering at the hands of the simpletons who raised him.
Personally, Will struggled to say they “raised” him, but he recognized that his parents had certainly taught him a lesson, whether they wanted to or not: Will was going to have to leave Berwyn if he ever wanted to have a chance to make a real difference in the world.
Will saw that the world needed to change; it wasn’t hard to see. He had a feeling that maybe, just maybe, he could help to bring about that change. He had a thirst for knowledge, an insatiable curiosity, and a profound sense of logic, all of which led him to question everything and be satisfied with only the most efficient solution to a problem.
Will was thoroughly hated by all of his neighbors.
His parents did nothing but discourage his creativity throughout his entire life; they burned all his books, threw out his pens, and tore his paper to pieces. He cried in desperation. No one listened.
Berwyn was a simple town. It was structured upon values that were hundreds of years old- from the 1900s, even. Everyone seemed the same in Berwyn; few people had any opinions that were truly personal, any ideas truly ground-breaking. Will at first struggled to see why anyone would think less of someone because of such a silly thing as skin color, much less a whole village of people. He came to understand, though: Berwyn was not a town where people changed.
These are the things that Will has thought to himself during the seven-hour course of his train ride into Ceuron.
Ceuron was a sparkling land of opportunity for Will. He knew practically nothing about it- just that it was immensely large and filled with all different kinds of people- but for Will, that was part of its charm.
He is ready for an adventure.
What do you guys think - which story idea is more favorable?
GMB13carat's Motivational Thread on 5/19/2016 2:46:18 PM
Was that a nod? Of course it was! And if it wasn't you're a pitiful square. You don't want to be a square do you? Being fit to have one's entire existence described with the italicized name of a polygon isn't exactly, y'know, hip. So follow along.
You're reading Super Popular, a handy guide to the ins and outs of what's "in" and what's "out." If you want to be the most popular kid in your school, then read on for a ton of handy tips!
To demonstrate this ton of tips to you, this guide will place you into a little story. In this story, you can be anyone you want to be! Haha, just kidding. Your entire personality is dictated by what others think of you- and that's just as it should be! Anyway...
Because this guide is Super™-progressive, we won't place gender labels on you! You'll simply play through this game as an ambiguously-gendered teen set out to super-ify their popularity. Got it? Good.
Here, click the "Start" link to start the story. Or don't. (Square.)
GMB13carat's Motivational Thread on 5/18/2016 6:26:14 PM
Fully completed pages: 6/???
Endings: 1/??? (it's the worst one, by the way)
Wow, so much progress.
Yeah, there's been some action, though. The game's already gotten super-duper-black-comedy-ish within about two pages (depending on your actions).
I'll be willing to share some more details now that there's some actual (albiet small) progress had. So yeah.
School Based Contest - 2016 on 5/18/2016 6:14:00 PM
I don't know how Kiel feels (my guess is he'll almost certainly be enthused), but for the record, I can't wait to read it. :)
Thank you, Admins on 5/18/2016 1:30:48 PM
Thanks, mods. You put up with a lot of shit. I can't imagine yours is an easy job in any way, shape, or form. So props to you.
JJJ-thebanisher is an excellent moderator of the site. As well as having excellent and prolific writing capabilites, JJJ has been a wonderful help to many members (as well as being one of the oldest active members, site-wise).
madglee for being a great mod and, from what I've seen, a writer with a very interesting and compelling style.
BerkaZerka is one of the most funny people on the site. Many people have said this many times, but that doesn't make it any less true. An additional salute for having the determination to write a full, novel-sized CYOA game.
Sethaniel is the mod-el mod. Always displaying a strong sense of integrity, always bettering the community in many ways, and always keeping a good sense of humor about.
And, of course, Kiel_Farren, who, although having only been a mod for quite a short amount of time, has already displayed excellent qualities as a mod and made the community a better place. He's also an excellent writer, a precise and helpful critic, and a very funny individual to boot.
Once again, props to all of you. You're the reason why this site's community has flourished as such for 15 years.
GMB13carat's Motivational Thread on 5/18/2016 12:16:35 PM
i will but not right now because i'd like to have a lot of time to really flesh the first one out
I didn't either. This is like a negative parody of things like Glee that also includes Satan worship, zombies, and international espionage.
You know, normal high school.
GMB13carat's Motivational Thread on 5/18/2016 12:06:52 PM
Okay, you know what, no.
I have a very bad habit of overestimating my writing ability. This project would be easily over 2 to 3 hundred pages, and considering we have about a month... it just ain't gonna happen. At least not for this contest, anyway.
I'm now working on a new project for this motivational thread. It's called Super Popular and is a blatant parody of the whole High School Musical-esque school-based game.
School Based Contest - 2016 on 5/18/2016 9:41:26 AM
Ah; nevermind then.
School Based Contest - 2016 on 5/18/2016 3:57:11 AM
Or, alternatively, you could join the contest and make it yourself.
Old Name New Face on 5/17/2016 5:15:26 PM
Nice to meet you, Havoc. I'm sure you'll have a good time on the site.
As already mentioned, Help & Info is always a great place to visit every so often. Make sure not to necro threads (AKA post in a thread that has had no activity for a while) unless you're looking to get yelled at, which I'm assuming you're not.
Anyway, have fun! I'm sure you'll love it here, and I look forward to seeing you as part of the community