17 Years

Player Rating1.55/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 49 ratings since
played times (finished )

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level1/8

"appropriate for all ages"
Stories with this maturity level will not, by design, have any potentially objectionable content. An example of a type story with this rating would be a quiz on mathematics.

Your name is Danielle and you are 17. Your best friend´s name is Khrisha and you 2 have been friends for 4 years now. You have a 2 guy friends named Daniel and Sage and you guys have been friends since you guys were little. They both like you and you have to pick one. Good luck!!!
Based on my life but I like them both and I don´t know if they like me lol

Player Comments

To be honest, the story is lacking in a few elements. A lot more description of the setting and especially the character's emotions is called for if you want to make the reader care about your characters. As they say, make them shine.

Also the description kills all the suspense for me, it would be more interesting if you didn't know whether the guy fancies you. I think if you want to make this story work, you need to put a lot of effort into it.
-- Future on 2/29/2016 10:42:03 AM with a score of 0
Very short. You say this is based off of your own life, but the children and husband part probably is not. Because, on your profile it says that you are 17 and in High School, isn't that a bit to young to marry and have two children?
-- Bouquin on 6/3/2016 3:46:52 PM with a score of 0
That was pretty short.
-- Kate on 5/23/2016 5:26:46 PM with a score of 0
There wasn't really all that much to this- there were only two endings that I could find, (they were both exactly identical, word-for-word, so...?) and I feel that it could've been written in less than 30 minutes. Overall, there's not much effort here, and it shows.

Next time, maybe put more thought into the story's plot? With a lot of work on both your parts, you could make a great story ^^
-- whoyougonnacall on 4/18/2016 10:04:34 PM with a score of 0
Extreme grammar issues, and extremely short. Felt rushed.
-- mattstat716 on 3/7/2016 1:45:38 PM with a score of 0
What's written isn't too bad - a pretty standard teenage romance - but there isn't enough story there for any character development or plot. This in turn makes the conclusion feel rushed and kind of forced.
-- the_quiller on 2/29/2016 4:14:36 AM with a score of 0
It's too short for me to make a detailed comment about it. All I took away from this story was that there were some characters, the characters did some things, and then BAM! Two of them got married and had kids.
-- OhWonder on 2/20/2016 3:17:34 PM with a score of 0
Needs some serious grammatical and spelling corrections. If you want some one to edit this for you and help fix these errors message me
-- JamesValkyrie on 2/19/2016 12:57:17 AM with a score of 0
Short and mundane.
-- ogcoolcat on 2/18/2016 10:27:21 AM with a score of 0
If you speak like you write, I'm willing to bed they don't like you.
-- Malkalack on 2/14/2016 4:50:14 PM with a score of 0
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