Astronaut: Chapter 1

This story definitely does not need to be split into parts. Not at all. The only choices given to me in this very, very short story is what my character says, which didn't even seem to make much of a difference anyhow. Plus, the last half of the story was just linear, which definitely wasn't enjoyable. Something I would also like to recommend is using quotation marks instead of dashes when a character is talking.

I thought this was going to be a story about how hard it is being an astronaut on the moon and getting there, having the joy of low gravity, but instead it was just three men lightly joking about going into space.

2/8

I like how it was dedicated to Neil Armstong, that was sweet. However, the average chapter is medium long. This, on the other hand, was really short.
You should've started the chapter with an introduction and should've had more detail to the beginning as well.

Make your stories longer.

I'm 100% sure chapter two ain't gonna come in the next decade or two. Hell, the last activity by the author was in 2012...

Way wayyyy too short to be a part 1. And there were very many awkward sentences. Adding much more detail would have helped improve my rating, but until you fix these issues, I'm rating this a 1/8. Sorry.

To be honest I think you should have made this a more interesting story, as well as having better reading text to make it easier for people to read.

Also, I think this story is too short :/

Short as hell. Wait, hell is eternal....derp.

This is too short to be a single chapter.

It's too short and has too little choices to choose from.

I'm so proud... I have no idea what the reality of life as an astronaut is but gosh darn it, I sure know I'm proud! Dear god this was bad but I definitely want to read the sequel :D