Benta Sinco

This story was severely lacking in the description department. The author gave absolutely no context for the story's events. What was my motivation? Who was I? I enjoyed the author's pictures and the actual writing mechanics were very simple, but not horrible.

While the lack of description was a crippling problem for this story, an even larger problem was the lack of branches. This was an incredibly linear story and that ruins a lot of the fun.

The pictures were fun and interesting. However, it was way too short and there's no proper ending. Before even thinking about branches in the story I think you might want to settle on a "main" ending before creating other side endings.

...too many ways to die-ie! 50/50 chance you'll die with every choice you make, not alot else to do with your choices...

The story itself, and the notion behind it was fine. I wish there was more description in the environments, and actual goals. Without that, or any backstory, you don't really feel a connection to the character, or a reason to keep them alive. Also, I couldn't find an actual ending. Maybe I just missed it, but all I found was a dead page. An actual ending would very much improve the game.

I like the story, but it was a little too short. There was some errors in the story. If I were the writer, I would describe how the wounds felt fighting the thief, how the reader would "feel" about sword fighting the thief.

It is WAY too short.

I have no background, and there is no successful ending. I even went back and tried everything, but if I run from the bandits, it doesn't have any links or anything.

Needs more choices, items and better endings.

Other than that, it was OK, I guess.

4/8

The game is incompleat and linar. Every action leads to a dead end link or end game.

I liked it at first, but then I got to a part where if I chased the bandit, I lost, and if I exited the town, the story randomly ends. It seems to have promise and quality, but it's just unfinished.

The game is too linear, and it doesn't really have a point.

Good for a first, liked the pictures but whenever you win you get no comments so you have have to lose in order to comment on this storygame.