Curse of the De'meir (Part 1)

A horror storygame by KaedenWolfFurry

Player Rating3.66/8

"#597 overall, #53 for 2013"

Based on 114 ratings since 04/17/2013
Played 1,424 times (finished 134)

Story Difficulty2/8

"Walk in the park"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level7/8

"Anything goes"

Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 18. If this were a movie, it would probably be R.

Tags

RPG

This is my first storygame, so its pretty Linear. Anyhow this storygame is about a custom creature I have made called the De'meir. You will learn more about it in game. I hope that I can inspire bone chilling terror in this story for you but I make no promises. You are the main character, you, whether you be male or female this is in YOUR perspective. The choices you make are YOURS so if you die don't blame the character for making the choice, it was you all along. Now you are about to encounter the curse...of the De'meir and find out why things are not what you believed they were.

I repeat this is my first storygame and therefore I have made it very Linear. If you wish to use my beast, contact me first via PM. I claim ownership of the De'meir for it sprung from my imagination. As long as you ask me first you can use it if you like :)

I currently am only making THIS first part. Only in one part of this game do I describe the De'meir. There are plenty of ways to easily die. I will be considering on making more choices and options available to the player in future parts as long as I get reviews and such if this storygame is sufficiently scary or thrilling or enrapturing. I want to know if people like the story before I continue it. I mean, before YOU continue it heehee. I mean what is the point of making this if no one likes it? Enjoy the beginning of the curse!

Player Comments

I personally had a lot of fun with this. I think it has an excellent storyline, and I liked the amount of detail that was put into describing the details. However, the word choice was relatively simple. If you're going for a better piece of writing, I would try expanding the story's vocabulary. But from a guy just trying to enjoy a good story, this had an excellent storyline and descriptions. Well done! I am certainly looking forward to the next part!

— GreenEagle on 4/28/2013 1:29:33 AM with a score of 0

I enjoyed this story. The fact that it is a part one ( and a fairly short part one ) leaves the story very unfinished. Upon completing this, I feel the same as when I get to read a couple preview pages before purchasing a book. That being said, what is here is pretty good.

The concept and the writing is pretty well done. From the start, the sense of mystery colors the mood, and little bits of uneasiness are progressively fed to the reader. The writing itself is decent and there are no glaring errors that take away from the story.

The characterization is fair. Although I didn’t really get to know the main character, enough was revealed to know why he went to the town to make it sufficient for the outset of the story. A little more understanding regarding the main character would have helped me get into the story a bit more.

There was not much branching in this story as mentioned by the author in the description. However, there was a little more than I expected after that disclaimer. Most of the choices though pushed you across one particular path.

This was way too short. I felt like it stopped just when i was getting some rhythm in the story. It would have been great to get a bit deeper into the story before it’s ending. Even if it was linear, I would have liked more to read.

Overall it was a pretty good and at least worth the read. I would have rated this a little higher had there been more story, but I felt what was here was done fairly well. A promising start to the story.

— DBNB on 5/14/2022 8:44:56 PM with a score of 0

It was interesting

— Tomer Diamant on 11/9/2021 6:11:24 PM with a score of 0

Good atmospheric design and description of the beast. However, it is not only linear, it feels like if choices don't really matter and the protagonist is rather plane. However, It has potential for the bext part.

— poison_mara on 2/3/2020 5:08:21 PM with a score of 0

Really liked it. When's 2 coming out? Grammar and punctuation need some work.

— Quorrah on 9/17/2018 12:12:41 AM with a score of 0

Pretty good, so far so good. I want more!

— Drydenhouse on 9/9/2018 11:01:06 PM with a score of 0

Kinda predictable, but great story, and I love how descriptive you are. Can't wait for part 2!

— Jreesebot on 8/31/2018 2:36:32 PM with a score of 0

On par with Goosebumps! Very well done, but why were random words capitalized? Kind of predictable, but still a decent story. Can't wait for part 2.

— Charalatte on 8/20/2018 9:05:16 PM with a score of 0

Interesting. Could use better vocabulary. All in all well done and frightening if you choose to be curious and not leave right away.