Helping Leena

seems interesting...

NO DEMOS. They are usually not completed, and also usually crap. Read this: http://chooseyourstory.com/help/articles/article.aspx?ArticleId=4046

It was good, but you really should finish it. I want to keep playing! In the future please don't post something that isn't finished. You have talent, but just stopping before the game even really begins is not okay.

This was far too short, granted it is a demo, but still, otherwise it is pretty interesting and leaves me wanting more. I didn't find any mistakes, but I read fast so I typically ignore them anyway.

looks good so far

Looks promising

It's extremely short, even for a demo.
Are you going to finish this? Because I think it would be very interesting. Like you have to say the right thing to get Leena to tell more, I don't know. Also maybe you could do something about the other patients before that you have to see.

Awhh, I never got to kill Dr Black in the library with a candlestick :(

Pretty good, maybe something that, you know, isn't a demo?

Good start but please finish your storygames before publishing them. Poste on writing workshop and get someone to look it over. I mean, we barely got to talking to lina.