How to Get the Girl

A fun concept but the endless series of broken links made me depressed. Clearly I'm out of touch with dating 2004 style :P

Spelling needs to be checked. It's really distracting when someone doesn't know how to use English language.

This isn't really a game and is dumb luck. It would be better to allow the reader to make informed choices and have multiple branches. This is either game over or continue.

Short but fun.

great game but you can make it higher

Boring I got the girl every time, but I guess thats because I’m a girl. Men take notes.

Its ok i like romance and im a dude but theres only a couple that really stck out here but i hope you make more man.

My first impression of this story is that of Japenese dating sims. The basic plot was that you walk into a bar, see a bunch of different girls, and you try to hit on them and eventually "get" one.

As a starter, the writing wasn't the best work I've seen all day. The writing is bland, with no descriptivity. It doesn't describe the bar, the girls, or anything, really. It just tells you, not painting a clear image in the head. Also, the grammar is horrendously bad. This really needs to be proofread. As an example, here is a snippet from one of the passages: "You go to the bar and pick up 2 rums and coke's." As you can see, the punctuation was very bad, which was a reoccuring theme throughout this whole charade. Also, there were no quotation marks whenever a girl (or you) spoke, throughout the entire story.

I didn't particularly favorite the choices, either. You could only "get" one girl out of, like, six you spy in the bar. The whole "How to Get the Girl" part goes down the drain because of the random rejection here. (Spoiler Start!) For example, the girl in the corner is apparantly the 16-year old daughter of the bartender. Just how were you supposed to know that little bit of information, anyway? Plus, why did he bring his daughter in the first place? This also occurs with another girl, I think the redhead, where you have to guess her favorite music type. There is Rap, Pop, and Alternative. Just how am I supposed to know what type she likes? And lastly, the best example I think, the blonde playing pool beats you up because you don't have any "balls" to play with her. So random, really. (Spoiler End!)

It seems like this isn't really teaching/showing/telling game about "getting" a girl, more like a guessing game where you get rejected pretty randomly, for random reasons.

I give it a 5/8.

alright

Meh. Not that good.

Much confuse. Very ginger. Wow.