In the Caverns

I liked it.

There was enough detail for me to see a picture of what you were writing, and that's a big plus when it comes to storygames.

The backstory was a really nice thing to have and really helped with the character development, which there was a nice amount of by the way :D

I did spot a few grammar and spelling errors, but nothing that can't be fixed with a little bit of proofreading. Overall the storygame was still great despite the errors.

It did seem very illogical at some points, such as the gnome murdering me for not eating his food and swallowing bones and fur and shit.

4/8, some errors but it was really good to be honest :)

I like how you began the story with the main character not at his best health, but I do wish I knew what his hardships were ahead of time to figure out how he came to be this way. Also, I felt more like I was reading a book rather than getting to choose anything; it was too linear. Also, it isn't that realistic that you would really try to eat a rat whole. First, if it as really a rat and not a mouse, you might not even be able to fit the entire thing in your mouth. Then trying to swallow the fur and bones was rather unrealistic. Biting the meat off and eating it raw, sure, but not even a starving person would swallow it whole. Logically, pulling it apart and eating the meat would be the bit more logical choice.
The story was pretty good, though, since you could understand how your surroundings felt; I just wish it was a bit longer.

Pros:
Gives reader the feeling of actually being in caverns
Enjoyable plot reminiscent of classic CYOA books
Semi-polished backstory and action scenes

Cons:
Grammar and syntax lacking polish
Some random endings with no indications from the previous page
Not fleshed out enough, could have used a few more drafts
Too short, could have combined sequels and this into one game

I thought that this was a very good story and I enjoyed the nature aspect, this is a good recommendation

It's an okay-ish game. I mean, maybe add more excitement to it.

IS THERE A WAY
DO YOU KNOW DA WAY

it was good

This game was quite boring.

I am so confused can someone tell me how to do this?????!!

this is basically the story of ways to die