Lon Lon's Melodies

This is a great concept and I actually felt a bit excited when I initially started reading. It kind of reminds me of Loom in a weird way, and I liked Loom for the concept, even though the story itself lacked. Unfortunately, the execution here also leaves a lot to be desired.

I like the instruments, I like the powers, I liked how the trumpet had a double edged power ... but the story was short, a bit cliché, lacked in detail over-all, and you weren't consistent. I picked the trumpet, but you gave me the option of using the ocarina.

You also gave me the powers of life and death with the trumpet, but my father died and even though "alive and dead are just titles to me" you gave me no option but to either accept his death and go home or get revenge.

I mean ... what? You need to either be clearer on the rules of your world or you need to STICK to the rules of your world.

Do keep trying, though. I think you have the makings of something really good here, -really- good, but it needs a lot of work.

At the beginning you had to choose one instrument but throughout the story I just used most of them...

not slightly funer then homework, homework I better

A very good story

A fun idea but could go a lot further and be a lot longer. How did I get all these magical instruments and why is there not one that makes me invisible? :) I like this but if it were longer it would be better :D