The Bloodweepers

It's a good start and the spelling and grammer is better than most of the stuff on this site.

It could make a good story as you know how to write, however "Zombie" has been done to death so it might be better to cut your losses and pick a slightly different theme.

I like it that there are several endings and see potential for a full story if you take the feedback in these comments onboard.

I get that this is a prototype, but the story was exceedingly...dry. The block of text in each page got to be too fast-paced (try making some text breaks) and each event was a bit disjointed from the last one. You've got an interesting story idea, but the story itself has yet to live up to the idea.

This seems like a promising story, and it is my belief that you should continue it. Since there are a few different endings it might be a little harder to continue from all of them, and if you decide to only keep one ending go with the "Clem" (walking dead) ending since that one seems to have a greater potential, and if done right might even get you featured. You have the idea now just master the story.

this story is very short but has a lot of story

My rating would be higher, had it been longer. Good base story.

Amazing writing. Just...wow

nice story

It feels like there should be more, you know? Because you said this is like the beginning of something bigger, that's understandable, but I'd really like to see this thing fleshed out. I'm excited! A pretty good read.

Pretty much a zombie apocalypse. Nothing groundbreaking.

It was a reasonable game, with a slightly cliche subject but has potential. But, it is too short, and you should probably work on making your game a little less cliche and linear. Above all, keep writing, and hopefully you take some things from this game into a new one. 5/8.