The Miracle of Jess

This storygame is a 99% linear story, clearly written as a straight-up narrative rather than with true interactivity. There is some use of items early on (these sort of fall away 1/3 of the way through, and they are never used in any particularly interesting way--the key goes in the lock.)

There are a couple of choices which, if you choose to push against the stream of the story, push you right back into the main narrative. "Go with the Doctor/Don't go with the Doctor"--both, of course, make you go with the Doctor.

I am not at all a Doctor Who fan. I know enough of it to be able to tell this is sort of a "best-of" mixer of some of the major enemies and types of plots. The main character here is a total dud. Perhaps this is typical for Companions. But she does little--*can* do little, because there are not choice. At one point someone actually says, "Get behind me, my lady!" to her.

Writing-wise, the story is serviceable, but not great. Serious punctuation and sentence-level errors show up on nearly every page, but the writing is totally readable, and there's some narrative momentum. I think this would have been much better just as a story--as an attempt at interactivity, it's a tough read.

Very linear, but still entertaining.

I like the story line, but here's a few things that I think that would make this story game "extraordinary."

First off, grammar. There were quite a few spelling mistakes and misuses of commas. Make sure to proof-read when done, or get someone else to.

Second, the story looped a lot. When I used the phone to call parents, I actually tried calling them on all of the pages;-;.

Third, I loved the length of the story, but there were barely any choices for that long of a story!!

Lastly, LET US MAKE OUR OWN CHOICES!! I what if I didn't want to go with the Doctor? If anything there should be a little more story then end game if you don't go with Doctor.

Other then that, the story has A LOT of potential!! LOVED IT(????)

I love love love love loved this story.. I was seriously hooked on it. I wish there was more.

SOO TOTALLY FUN TO READ!!! :)

Would've liked to see a romance blossom.

No Means No

Although I am not a fan of Dr. Who and sometimes didn't understand what was going on, it will be hard to find a fan fiction story game as well written as this one!

Great story. You got me really interested about Doctor who! I just might start watching the series!

I think this could even be considered feature-worthy if not for its linearity. That was my only problem. It was too freaking linear. Otherwise, this was awesome.

Wooooo Doctor Who