The academy of sorcery

it is a nice base

While the story itself is pretty good, the writing is pretty bad there should be more choices.

Good game but I would rather have detailed deaths than a health-bar... I'll be waiting for the full version beforeI rate.

For a demo, this would be below my average par, but who am I to judge? By the way, a bit of proofreading and revision would be helpful, even though it takes forever. So, uuuuum, nice story.

It seems to have good potential.

ok

Good enough to finish. Could work on punctuation and paragraph organization.

Not bad. Has some plot, decent spelling, and I like the whole idea of a magic school. Some things to be aware of though. First, you probably want to make sure that you do not try and make it sound like you know who. If it starts sounding similiar to that series that's also about a magic school peopel may get upset. Other than that, things move a little quickly. I got stabbed badly and lose a lot of health and the main character just shakes it off like it was nothing. And I got attacked by some crazy person and he is friends with her a few pages later.

I think that you should continue with the story. It has potential. I'm not going to rate it because it's a demo.

Keep it up.