Wolf's Story

I'm not here to be rude, so don't get worried about this comment. ^^

I think a way you could improve the story is letting the reader have more choices for you to pick. Rather than focusing on getting a mate, what about raising my wolf's rank in the pack? Or maybe I discovered a dangerous secret that could threaten the pack - or maybe I get captured by humans! There's lots of parts where it seems like you were eager to publish the story a bit too soon.

Another thing: the Loner choice wasn't so great... I was hoping I would get to roam the woods or something by myself. I think the decision to put lots of the same endings side-by-side, giving no hope for exciting stuff as a loner, was a bit disappointing. There has to be something I can do other than search for mates! Focusing on survival and hunting, among other things, are what could happen - especially if I'm a wolf.

Overall, this currently seems more like a... wolf dating sim than anything else. I enjoyed it a lot though - you must've put lots of work into it! I would enjoy possibly a sequel, a prequel or even an update to this magnificent story!

3/8, but not bad for a first game!

Haha whenever I read these stories I like to imagine fur-fic-fans being let into an enclosure to pet a couple of grey wolves that haven't been fed for a few weeks to see how cute they really are then ("Aw, come here you... what! No! ARRGGHH! My face! My favourite arm!"):D Fortunately in these stories wolves seem a bit more... teddy bearish.

This story was pretty good though, the writing was ok but some of it seemed a bit strange, for example I've never been asked before on a scale of 1-10 how excited I am about meeting someone because I don't usually express my emotions in numbers but possibly it made planning the story easier. Also the "cool" and "let's go" links at the beginning both travelled in the same direction which isn't really a choice :D

Finally I'd suggest more options at the beginning, choosing your gender and coat is ok (though personally I wanted to be a blue and green wolf with octagon eyes because then the coat choice might have had an impact on the story) but if you're going to do that you might as well include name options.

Overall not bad though and playing through to the different endings was fun but the idea is a familiar one and sometimes I wish my wolf/cat/dog/turtle character found himself in a moral dilemma or genuinely emotional situation or possibly even just an attack on a camp of scouts :)

This was riddled with errors, but for a first try and an animal perspective game, it was ... better than most WC fanfics, anyway.

You still have plenty of room for improvement, James has some good points in his review, and I'd advise looking into the articles and studying the more popular games on the site to see what you can learn from them.

I'm a bit disappointed that you only get one possible name per gender regardless of physical appearance, but that's a nit-pick I guess.

Actually, my issue with the naming thing is more so the names themselves. 'Draco' is kind of bizarre as a wolf name. It means 'Dragon' and wolves have literally no reason to have any association with dragons at all. Unless your story has a dragon in it and I just totally missed that part, I guess.

The girl name is ... interesting. "Kilra" would logically be pronounced "Kill-ruh" so I have no idea where you got "Kyra" from. >_> Or wait, maybe I do. :P I have a sneaking suspicion I've seen that name in another story before. >.> Gee, I wonder which one it was... -_-' hmmm...

Really good but should should make it into a actual game!

it was alright, not very much to do, but it was great what there was! yes i know this was made like 10 years ago

I love this story game(I killed my the bear lol I should've chose the other one) I would say add more options maybe to give the game more possible endings you know to make as fun as possible.thats all i see as like a suggestion bye-bye

i had a horrible ending why even ad the alone part i hopig to be happy but this is not worth trying.

Pretty good just needs to be longer

Best one yet.

The Story was okay! A bit short sadly, i wish it’d last longer but im not telling you to make it longer! Im just saying. Thanks to this game im abit happier to day thanks for making it..!