Player Rating1.29/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 12 ratings since
played times (finished )

Story Difficulty5/8

"run through the jungle"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

Funny short and based in Alabama. A lot of dark humor so play at your own risk. Expect more choose your own adventures from me as i'm working on a long one. This one took about an hour to make. Enjoy and give me feed back. I have a few refrences to some video games, movies and tv shows so if you catch the refrences please share them in the comments.

Player Comments

Weird, thought chop and wrote job :S Anyway, the point still stands.
-- Will11 on 4/9/2020 1:48:09 AM with a score of 0
This is a new Player Comment.

Yeah, it has been said. Random does not equal funny on its own. Random equals random. Insert a plot, put in ten times the effort and then click publish. We want to encourage a standard of good stories and stories that don't meet that threshold will get the job quicker than a turkey the week before Thanksgiving. Read the Help and Info articles and some of the featured stories for ideas and inspiration and good luck with your next story :)
-- Will11 on 4/9/2020 1:46:37 AM with a score of 0

You didn't have the intelligence to erase that from the first page. Even five years kids doing school chores were capable of erasing that. I am portraying you for two days doing the hocus pocus dance instead of a minimum edition.
-- poison_mara on 4/8/2020 10:38:40 PM with a score of 0
Amazingly bad.
-- ninjapitka on 4/8/2020 10:19:04 PM with a score of 0
-- CaptainBoswell on 4/8/2020 9:57:35 PM with a score of 0
The title was eye-catching and promised a horror story, but then the red flags started popping up, beginning with "took about an hour to make" and leading immediately to "full of references".

The genre is not horror but 'lolrandom', and that's a style of game that rarely does well here. It's associated with rushed stories written by kids without much of a grasp on spelling and punctuation, and humor that mostly falls flat, and well, that fits here.

The reason the site has a 48 hour delay on publishing these btw is because that's the suggested bare minimum time to spend on writing a storygame.

Anyway, it's good you were able to teach yourself to use the editor in that time, but there was no real need to publish this and it will likely be taken down by the site for not meeting minimum standards. Next time I'd recommend a story of at least twice the word count with more of a coherent plot, and time spent proofreading for errors before you make it public.
-- mizal on 4/8/2020 9:32:05 PM with a score of 0
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