Celestial Lies: Chapter Two

I played through it a few times...

This is quite disappointing, because chapter one was a lot better then this. I understand making part ones, part twos, etc can sometimes make it feel like you need to publish things as soon as possible, but please spend more time on your storygames.

I loved chapter one, but this had a large drop in quality, for many reasons, such as a more boring plot, a very confusing writing style, less detail, and very undesriptive events.

There were mutiple errors throughout this storygame. Proofreading is very crucial, and compared to chapter one, this was lacking emotion, detail, character development...

I think you should have spent more time on this, because it feels as if it was written by a completely different person in all honesty.

3/8, a step down. Try harder please.

This is a serious drop in writing quality from Chapter One of Celestial Lies. While it's not terrible, the writing is sloppy (eg. "Just a few hours, you were finding freedom" has no "ago" in it) and doesn't keep me interested.

The narrative was confusing. I'm not entirely sure how we ended up here after the events of Chapter One, but I rolled with it. Again, the storygame was very linear. I appreciate that you've actually put in some proper choices that don't lead to instant death, but there's still only one way to "win" this storygame.

This is a very significant step down from your first part of the series. Not only are all of the problems from the first part still prevalent but your major strength from part 1 (the quality of the writing) is not a strength here. This story is fraught with grammatical errors and especially numerous tense errors. This was carelessly edited and squanders much of the potential that the series carried.

haha creature go brrrrr
Didn't die cuz i played smart, loved the game.

It doesn't seem like a good idea to revive a character that has been epicly killed off at the last second. All in all this was a good story and I enjoyed it but it could have been longer and had less false branches/decisions.
It also feels a little rushed, you could always take some time to flesh out some of the options some more and turn them into branches.

I gave you a 5. I highly recommend you add pictures for items

Well, is it a way to defeat the fiend in the portal???

It was too short. I didn't read half of text because I found the text not interesting. It progresses to fast.

pretty fun. cant wait till the next one

Cool story, but where are my friends from the first game, and how did I get in a desert?