Player Comments on epic sword fight

lame.

I'm usually a big fan of the "so bad it's good" stories, but this is just bad and incomplete. At least I got a point.

hotdog water

This has been taken down for not meeting minimum standards to stay published.

Take some time to read the help articles, look at other storygames on the site, read some books, learn basic English grammar, etc.

If this is published again it will be deleted.

You want to hear about a real epic sword fight, you should ask your mom about the one she had in her mouth.

I was moved to tears.

I won. Where's my cash?

"thats it"

THAT'S IT? You think writing up a mere 250 words and slapping it on the page qualifies as a storygame? Listen here young man, here at CYS this shit ain't accepted. Ya gotta at least put in some effort to even pretend that you're writing something of substance. (you're, might want to touch up on your grammar.)

There is about as much content as, well, there's no content.

Try again next time, if there is a next time you ever get up on your lazy ass and do something worth our time.

shiiiiid

Best to keep unpublished until you've got more substance to the story, like what the fight's about or what's at stake (besides dying). I like the focus on choices, though. Do that, but with description, detail, and some kind of plot and the story will be much better received

Epic

Thanks for the point.