ESL Billy's Adventure

Before you read this, I have literally no clue what ESL is and that probably would affect the purpose of the story.

I’m pretty sure the person who wrote this story isn’t even active on the site anymore, but it’s okay. I just wanted to say how surprised I am at how short and enjoyable this story was. It has a decent plot and storyline, but it lacks WORDS; this story has so much potential that will sadly never be fulfilled. There are so many why’s, and what’s and who’s that could be answered through more words. So many subplots to be created; sadly, the person who wrote this can’t put enough effort into the game.

Issues, besides the fact that there are literally zero words in this game and every page, there is a maximum of ten words. There were a lot of issues with the choices, it felt like reality bent. Like you would choose the invisibility path, and it would make you invisible until you decided to send you home, which would result in your mom being able to see you. Little details like that example really drag on this story and not make it as fun to read.

Okay, this is after I have researched ESL, and this is actually a WHOLE better and almost decent. As of the time I am writing this, I am taking a second language, and it can be challenging to read meaningful stories, so I think that this is absolutely beautiful, and I’m changing my rating from a 4 to a 6. It’s meant to be short and sweet, but it still does lack an abysmal amount of effort. I think the author saw ESL as an opportunity to slack off when writing a story when, in reality, you have to work harder to make the story and plot even better. So that might explain the lack of effort.
There were some obvious grammar issues, and with stories that force their reader to focus on every single word, skimming isn’t possible, sooooo grammatical errors stand out twice as much. Sadly, with the amount of effort put into the game, grammatical errors cannot be escaped. There weren’t that much surprisingly, but surprisingly there were still a few.
Overall, this story and plot was decent; the grammar was also proper; the common sense implemented in the game was nonexistent. There were a few stupid choices and a weirdly creative plotline for every single decision. Lastly, it lacked words, and effort this game at least to me has extraordinary potential everyone else in the comment’s seemed to hate it. However, it has a slightly below-average rating.
There are probably a few end links I’m missing and other crap, but it’s alright.

Thank you for everything. I like this story. Thank you because the story was crazy with a lot of things. It's very scary, this story. Very crazy. I laughed. We are students.

THANKS!

It was difficult.

I don’t know how to do the game .

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this game suck

this is actually good.

it's good but needs more pictures.

loved it