a Horror by DMnv12

Player Rating4.70/8

"#300 overall, #30 for 2015"
based on 112 ratings since 06/09/2015
played 1,476 times (finished 144)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length3/8

"A nice jog down the driveway"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

As a necrotic disease with paranoid, schizophrenic, violence-oriented side effects sweeps across the Fairmont City and Barnes Bennett River area, survival is the only option other than infection.

This is my first story-game. Comments, criticism, etc. will be appreciated.

Player Comments

Very eerie and creepy, I liked it. Your ability to create tense and horrifying situations is remarkable. I never truly felt safe for a single second, and this made me only want to escape to somewhere safe even more.

It also helped that the descriptions of the hosts were creative. Rather than being a typical zombie game in which nothing is explained as to why the undead are suddenly attacking, this subverts it and I liked that aspect. While some tried and true cliches were present, this was written well enough that such minor detriments were not an issue in spoiling my enjoyment of the story.

Bravo! :)

Still, it sucks when things end a bit abruptly. You certainly have plenty of talent to make something enjoyable and unique from the zombie genre, and it certainly would have been a positive if this was a bit longer. As a standalone storygame, this is written well. It's a rather impressive introduction when all things are considered, but one that leaves a slightly bittersweet taste.

Overall, this is something that I would like to see continued.
-- TharaApples on 1/19/2017 11:47:01 PM with a score of 0
Although this game was rather short, it was enjoyable. I felt that the plot was a bit cliche (rather similar to a zombie survival story), but you did a good job making your story unique. The descriptions of the scenes were well-written, and you included the right amount of details - enough so that I could see what was going on without growing bored or overwhelmed. I also liked the choices you gave us. You provided enough so that I felt like I was a part of the story and had the ability to control its flow. The fact that you had good grammar and spelling was a bonus - it becomes frustrating when I see a good story, but it's barely readable due to many mistakes. I encourage you to continue writing. 6/8
-- SummerSparrow on 4/11/2016 2:59:09 PM with a score of 0
Not bad, I like your style of writing and the tension is there. Unfortunately this is still a zombie apocalypse game with a twist and those are a dime a dozen so if you're going to go down this well-worn road you need to do something to really stand out otherwise the whole story feels fairly predictable. This was a good start but if you write a sequel I think you should get much more ambitious :)
-- Will11 on 6/9/2015 8:14:52 PM with a score of 0
Awesome story :). But, There is a lot of swearing. That’s not necessarily Bad, it’s just a little unpleasant. But other than that, great story!
(I got into the Subaru and best ending :). I’m working on a zombie game with Nose119. I’m also working on a story about raindrops.)
-- Clydesdale on 1/18/2019 2:37:57 PM with a score of 0
I thought it was very good, but very short. I really got into the story and then it was over 1-2 pages later. A sequel would be cool, but maybe expand on this game a bit first? Or release a couple short sequels so the story can progress. In terms of what was actually there it was very creepy and suspenseful! I like the idea and premise. The olny thing I don’t get: why do the worms kill some people and exit, while others are taken over as “hosts?” For example the mechanic, shouldn’t the worm take over him and attack using him? Maybe it drops the gun, because it doesn’t know how to use one, but then the mechanic should attack. After you kill him, perhaps the worm comes out and you proceed to the battle with it? It would make the story longer and more consistent. Also the last page, “this is the best possible ending...” I am not sure if this is unfinished or if this was intended to be like a note after the story, but it felt out of place. Just have an ending and let the reader play around to find out if it’s the “best” ending or not. I might have played again to check out other options!
-- Shadowdrake27 on 1/18/2019 12:06:48 PM with a score of 0
keep it going!
-- your hot single mom on 1/17/2019 5:00:56 AM with a score of 0
Written well, but a bit more depth in endings would have made it feel more like a story and less like a see if you can survive the night kinda game. Basically you either live or die. Overall it was a creepy little story. The part where the parasite was trying to get into your characters mouth is definitely the moment which sticks out for me as the creepiest.
-- lilyluna on 1/13/2019 12:27:00 PM with a score of 0
Way too short. I got the best ending in like 5 or 6 minutes. Grammar was good, punctuation was flawless. It was a decent story, it succeeded in making me feel unsettled when I was playing, would've liked a lot more content.
-- SmileForTheCamera on 1/7/2019 4:15:48 PM with a score of 0
It was not badly written, and I enjoyed the story, but I think it was lacking in the choices department. The majority of the choices had no affect on the story save an extra page.
For example: when you are in the car with the co-worker, you have the option to listen to the radio or not. If you choose to, you hear a news report on the parasite. Whichever you choose, the next page after has the co-worker freaking out. It would have maybe been good if the author had made it so that he was calm until you got to the hospital if he didn't hear the report. Either way he I infected, but that would have opened up more possibilities for what could happen next.
-- Cricket on 1/7/2019 4:06:31 PM with a score of 0
it's short but very fulfilling for a first game
-- guy on 1/7/2019 12:06:18 PM with a score of 0
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