Ineptitude 2: ELECTRIC BOOGALOO
Commended by TharaApples on 4/21/2021 5:26:54 PM
, #22 for
played 696 times (finished 73)
"no possible way to lose"
"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"
"must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.
Write or be SHAMED!!! *Any resemblance to real life persons, living or dead, is entirely coincidential.
Entertaining and arguably shorter than some of these reviews.
on 10/12/2020 2:43:36 AM with a score of 0
Yay! I won as well!
On a different note, this should be required reading for every contestant before signing up, no matter their experience level. I am sad I didn't read it earlier so I could discard the advice like the pigheaded retard I am.
on 8/10/2020 4:28:27 PM with a score of 0
This is book about chicken nuggets for all children
-- Turtle buttington on 7/10/2020 6:43:39 PM with a score of 0
A story in which fagots get what they deserve,laziness can be its own reward and the smallest of efforts can get you something in life. Too bad it's not much.
Setting: The setting does not have a lot of descriptive details. Cys greatness is never described in greater details. Thus making the mc joining the contest a bit lackluster. What exist is only visible in some routes. And even then it's minuscule. Not a great deal of effort was put into exploration of environment. Though considering the nature of the plot it is to be expected
Overall nothing remarkable. Just bland
Plot: Now this is where the game shines. It's humorous and in some routes not so predictable. It perfectly captures the spirit of Cys forum. I wish there were some funny user comments added to the plot. In routes where pc gets shamed or wins the contest.
Grammar: Now while i heavily enjoyed the writing it does come of as a bit informal and unpolished. When the mc is shouting the text uses capital letters instead of exclamation marks. Sometimes you have lines like "of fucking course" rather than the formal " of course" little things like that makes the product unpolished. However it does not deteriorate the humor.
For that i give it a 6/8
on 7/3/2020 6:38:43 AM with a score of 0
Humorous, had me laughing the whole way through. Makes you wonder what choices the author made.
P.s. Pesky bird
-- Echo on 6/23/2020 9:01:26 PM with a score of 0
I'm a lot late to the party but i found this to be a very witty and comedic read. I smiled all the way through.
on 5/1/2020 12:43:39 PM with a score of 0
Yay! I won!
on 2/8/2020 12:54:25 AM with a score of 0
I'll admit, I actually really liked this. It left me laugh out loud several times. It was especially relatable considering the recent contest CYS just held. You are good at writing humour. The grammar could've been improved a bit, and I would've liked to see more consistency with the line breaks. Overall, it was still quite enjoyable.
on 1/13/2020 1:22:36 AM with a score of 0
You adorable, dumbass son of a sick bastard, I was actually reading a CYS story a while back when my roomate began to imitate the very one in your story. Awesome!
Cute, fun, evasive. A+ on dodging any real responsibility.
on 12/18/2019 10:30:29 AM with a score of 0
Wow, that was quite the self-deprecating fluff piece. I like it. Good job, Cricket.
on 12/9/2019 3:12:20 PM with a score of 0
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