Player Comments on Ineptitude 2: ELECTRIC BOOGALOO

Wrote a furry romance, how'd you know me so well?

Brilliant.

Beautiful

This was a good story and you will enjoy it too.

This story was very uncomfortable to read. Not because of the lolicon or the hentai, nor was it because of that random "go on a rampage and murder your roommate and possibly his girlfriend too" end.
No, it's uncomfortable because of how realistic the descriptions of procrastinating are.
8/8

Entertaining and arguably shorter than some of these reviews.

Yay! I won as well!

On a different note, this should be required reading for every contestant before signing up, no matter their experience level. I am sad I didn't read it earlier so I could discard the advice like the pigheaded retard I am.

Great story.

This is book about chicken nuggets for all children

A story in which fagots get what they deserve,laziness can be its own reward and the smallest of efforts can get you something in life. Too bad it's not much.


Setting: The setting does not have a lot of descriptive details. Cys greatness is never described in greater details. Thus making the mc joining the contest a bit lackluster. What exist is only visible in some routes. And even then it's minuscule. Not a great deal of effort was put into exploration of environment. Though considering the nature of the plot it is to be expected
Overall nothing remarkable. Just bland

Plot: Now this is where the game shines. It's humorous and in some routes not so predictable. It perfectly captures the spirit of Cys forum. I wish there were some funny user comments added to the plot. In routes where pc gets shamed or wins the contest.

Grammar: Now while i heavily enjoyed the writing it does come of as a bit informal and unpolished. When the mc is shouting the text uses capital letters instead of exclamation marks. Sometimes you have lines like "of fucking course" rather than the formal " of course" little things like that makes the product unpolished. However it does not deteriorate the humor.

For that i give it a 6/8

Humorous, had me laughing the whole way through. Makes you wonder what choices the author made.
P.s. Pesky bird

I'm a lot late to the party but i found this to be a very witty and comedic read. I smiled all the way through.

Yay! I won!

I'll admit, I actually really liked this. It left me laugh out loud several times. It was especially relatable considering the recent contest CYS just held. You are good at writing humour. The grammar could've been improved a bit, and I would've liked to see more consistency with the line breaks. Overall, it was still quite enjoyable.

You adorable, dumbass son of a sick bastard, I was actually reading a CYS story a while back when my roomate began to imitate the very one in your story. Awesome!
Cute, fun, evasive. A+ on dodging any real responsibility.

Wow, that was quite the self-deprecating fluff piece. I like it. Good job, Cricket.

I just like everything Cricket does. The words could all be random pounding on the keyboard for all I care.

True story, bro

The perfect sequel to the perfect story. Great job Cricket.

I loved it. You really captured the CYS spirit.

As your older sister, I can only support your decisions to the best of my abilities and wholeheartedly. And with some shred of wholesomeness.

Cricket, please return home after whatever this is. Father is worried and mother is drinking again.

Yes, this is a roundabout way of saying that your story is umm, bad. I rated it generously only so you may gain some semblance of conscience or regret (hopefully both) and do what you know is right at the end of the day.

Yours always, Thara.

P.S,

I've been renting your bed out to hobos while you were away, so you may want to burn the sheets.

Actually, you may want to burn the entire mattress.

lmao fucking noob get good

Great book, this should be a tough decision for the contest.

PS
I hope you rot in noob hell, good sir

This....this...was utter, entire shit. You can tell it was rushed just in time for the deadline.
Also seems like wvery other choice leads to a dead end, the game was very short in general.

Short, hopefully, like your time here on CYS. Ill enjoy watching you Boogaloo out the door once the community rips you apart for your Ineptitude, noob swine.

A welcome and much-needed update to the classic "MyAdventureGame.com the Game."

All the more fun when you can pick out who the Main Character can be based off of.

menstrual blood