Squirrel Life 1

It was better than I expected from a 2.5k word lolrandom game part 1.

Normally I would start complaining about it being one part of multiple because of how short it is, but this actually works as a complete storygame. There's some plot, characters, and a final battle. Though I doubt there'll ever be a squirrel life 2.

I found the pictures funnier than I should have. There's something about badly photoshopped squirrels with hats and superpowers that's surprisingly endearing.

The restarts significantly lowered my enjoyment of this game. I heavily suggest unpublishing this to add an endgame link at death endings, no one likes being forced to restart.

The 'grab the fries' page was glitchy, with one link that just looped to the same page, and another with the title 'make a page here'.

There was some good branching, but all the branches bottlenecked at the boss fight. I'd prefer to see some different endings, other than death, as well.

That's the problem with games that are one part of many, they can only have one. You can get past this by having one 'true' ending, and continuing the sequel from there.

Some small SPAG errors throughout as well, which is strange for something so short. Would benefit from a proofread.

Just for the restarts, I'm giving this a 3. Would be a 4, maybe 5, with a good proofread, a bit more detail, and no forced restarts.

this was hilarious, but I wish there was a way to save all the eggs

This was like a squirrel action movie very wild!

this was epik

Best game ever!

nigga this shit was so good I came in my pants

The best story I have ever read.

That was actually really good

Adorable story with a bit of gruesomeness. (Only very little though)

I fell in love with the squirrel main character immediately. It scurries! It has little paws! Even without description of the features, you successfully painted an image of how a squirrel moves with accurate verb usage.

The thing I liked a lot was the abundance of paths to choose from. There were three choices on most of the pages, which is a lot for a short story! Some of them did lead back to the other choices eventually, but that doesn’t cancel out the experience obtained before. The pictures also made the story hilarious (it’s not every day you see a squirrel with a halo!) You also did a lot of showing and not telling, for example the squirrel’s eyes got spotty when it was hungry. That’s something I have to work on, so thank you very much for the demonstration!

Of course, my dim witted squirrel brain didn’t get to the good ending and died at the end, but I still got to go to squirrel heaven, which was fine. Overall a very delightful light read!

I am in tears from laughing. I don't know about others, but this is a pretty good game if you want a laugh.