The Ocean's Daughter

a Love & Dating by fergie14233

Commended by BerkaZerka on 9/21/2019 9:17:24 AM

Player Rating6.08/8

"#54 overall, #9 for 2012"
based on 1275 ratings since 01/17/2012
played 21,140 times (finished 1,359)

Story Difficulty4/8

"march in the swamp"

Play Length3/8

"A nice jog down the driveway"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

The girl shrouded in mystery . . .

Additional info:

You play the role of a male character named Brandon.

There are three possible endings: the bad, the average, and the perfect ending. To get the perfect ending, you need a perfect score, so it's hard to get.

Notes: I have fixed the problem with the end link with help from Killa_Robot.

Player Comments

The Ocean’s Daughter is not a horrible story, but it left me rather disappointed, considering it was featured. Perhaps someone who likes slice-of-life romance would have a greater appreciation for it than I.

The grammar is decent, and the story is very readable. The format is mainly a bunch of scenes with different outcomes depending on choice, and the story itself has little branching. I only found two endings, but it seems there is a third if the reader makes all the correct choices. Unfortunately, I played through many times making different choices and could not be bothered to do it again after a while because, frankly, I was really bored at that point

Now, let’s get all the things that didn’t make sense to me out of the way. How is Brandon growing all that fruit at one time. Fruit grows in different climates, soils, and seasons. You can’t just say, “Hey, this is a tropical island. I know. I’ll grow fruit!” and grow whatever you like and have whatever you want all be in season at once, yet here this dude is able to successfully grow all manner of things. There’s a reason that apples come from places such as Washington and bananas come from places like Honduras.
While we’re on diet, why would a mermaid be vegetarian? That seems like it would be quite difficult in the ocean for something close to a human. It is not as if they can grow fields of beans down there. Why would Marina be mad if Brandon caught fish anyway? At that point in the story, she’s presumably been living with him for a quite a while, and it is not as if he can live off his magic, all climate fruit garden forever with no ill effects—or maybe he can, it being magic and all.

The story does not have much of a plot and is more of a slice of life thing or a collection of memories. That is not inherently bad, but I would have liked some more humor or something going on other than eating magic fruit and kissing chicks. Most slice-of-life stuff has some humor to it or really strong characterization so that the reader can enjoy the story despite it portraying such un-noteworthy events.
I am sure that some people would find it cute and appreciate it, but that’s my opinion.

The ending came rather abruptly. There’s a bunch of scenes, and then she’s gone. I would maybe have liked that if the framing of the story was different, but as it was I was mostly disappointed that nothing had happened. Maybe the perfect ending I didn’t find was different, but it shows care was put into the story when all real ends are somewhat satisfying to read.

If you aren’t looking for a story with heavy plot, don’t want to think to hard about things, and like cutesy romances, maybe check this out.

-- Cricket on 6/15/2019 2:05:06 PM with a score of 250
I need strawberries...

Absolutely without a shadow of a doubt. THIS is one METICULOUSLY crafted love storygame. At first it was kinda like Snow, but it has its own unique sea-side (pun intended).

Aside those, no errors were in spelling or grammar, the character's development with the other (*cough *cough Marina *cough *cough) was realistic, and their love scenes were so sweet, just like hazelnut ice cream (no, not strawberries).

One thing which sort of cut short the excellent story, however, was the ending. It wasn't really detailed, as if it was rushed into place. An epilogue could have been icing on the perfect cake. Not to worry, it's not the end of the world. Just have more development on the endings in your stories to come (I hope you DO have more to come).

I missed out some Reeses' Cups Ice Cream just to read this. 7/8.
-- AgentX on 3/8/2017 5:48:06 AM with a score of 280
'The Ocean's Daughter' is written beautifully. Despite other comments, I think that the grammar and spelling was done exceptionally well compared to other stories on this website. There are no complaints from me on that end.

Though I have to admit that I did have trouble connecting with any of the characters. I feel that there could have been more character development, and I certainly would enjoyed reading more about the mermaid and her past. The ending struck me as a bit disappointing; I was expecting more of a climax or build-up at that point. (Though I clearly got the bad ending.)

Overall, this is a well written short story. The author has talent and skill in terms of writing fiction. If only I could have learned more about Marina and her life as a mermaid! Maybe if I play again, the "good" ending will be better...?

Rating: 6/8
-- Killah_B on 3/7/2014 8:54:11 PM with a score of 270
Mediocre writing, lots of typos, lack of punctuation, story doesn't make much sense (convenient things washing up on the beach etc), predictable twist at the end with no build-up, stereotypical and offensive female character.
-- Stensland on 4/10/2020 11:01:01 AM with a score of 265
It was great, not to meantion that I loved the twist at the end. I only wish there was a chance for Maria NOT to leave.
-- Olivia on 3/6/2020 10:34:00 PM with a score of 235
-- Hi on 2/17/2020 12:02:20 PM with a score of 235
sad good but sad
-- ramesseso2013 on 2/1/2020 2:16:14 PM with a score of 270
Excuse me, why do I get a sad ending when I say I love Marina but get the good ending only when I say I didn't??! What logic is this
-- ExcuseMe on 9/24/2019 3:28:29 AM with a score of 275
I loved it
-- CuteGirl1 on 9/2/2019 12:09:00 PM with a score of 255
Really though? It's called the ocens daughter, I mean I get that part, but this is a sad love story, not a mermaid story... well mostly.
-- Reginawolf on 7/23/2019 8:19:15 PM with a score of 230
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