The Razing of Nipthm
"Too few ratings to be ranked"
Played 63 times (finished 13)
"March in the swamp"
"A well spent lunch break"
"Aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.
You live a small farming life on Nipthm, a planet of scrublands and grasslands. Trouble heads your way, and it's bringing a mortal danger you can't avoid. United Space doesn't bother trying to protect the outer worlds. You're on your own.
This is a story for Endmaster's Manifest Destiny contest. It was made in such a short period of time I wouldn't have normally been allowed to publish it (2 days). Hopefully it's entertaining, and I didn't make too many errors. Enjoy!
Well, this was certainly entertaining. You don't have to worry about that aspect, Night. At least in my opinion, I found this story-game to have quite a number of branches. Ultimately that's what I feel is important for a CYOA game at the end of the day, for there to be choices, and for those choices to be able to change the story. Those changes can be minimal to radical, and this game does not have a shortage of either.
You can of course fulfill the original mission that you're set out to do, or you can get into gambling, become some sort of martial arts practitioner, or even leave for another planet entirely. What I liked about this story-game is that it seems like although it is quite short, there's freedom and agency that's here as well. Also, it's written well and that's always welcomed.
I guess a gripe is that although there's more than one or two epilogues, not all of them are written equally when it comes to terms of quality. That's not to say that the writing takes a dive, but that some of the endings are more blurb-like than others. I figure that such a thing was the case because of time constraints perhaps? Still some of the endings range from satisfying to even hilarious. So hats off on that front, Night.
This left me wanting to see more from you in terms of writing in all honesty. So good work on this.
on 9/7/2021 11:15:09 PM with a score of 0
Raoul's stache was one of the most funny recurring jokes! He's the man, the legend.
The story is definetely entertaining!
on 9/13/2021 4:09:36 AM with a score of 0
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