You!

Ok, I suppose.

The utter randomness of the storygame really threw me through a loop, because some parts I could barely understand. It was that random. Some of the illogical parts might not have been on purpose, such as hearing your own skull break. I'm not sure you'd be able to hear your own skull break from compression, honestly.

It wasn't the longest storygame i've ever seen, but there's quite a few links and more then a few sentences on each page. I'm very glad it wasn't just another one of those crappy two click win or lose games.

Sadly, I didn't spot much detail or character development, or even much decent emotion for that matter. I mean, even if there was any emotion, the large amounts of random humor sorta took away from it in my opinion.

That aside, I did enjoy some parts of the storygame, because I love a bit of randomness once in a while, but not a lot.

It was incredibly linear, and I felt like I was reading a paragraph from one book, then reading another from a completely unrelated book and trying to figure out how I got from one to the other.

Overall, many downsides, but a fun read. 3/8.

It was certainly quite random, but I saw no apparent issues with the grammar and this storygame was rather serviceable in providing me with much entertainment. This certainly had a certain charm to it with all of the randomness. While this may not be for everyone, this isn't a bad story by any means and it is something that I found to be rather enjoyable.

Bravo :)

This story was veryyy random, which is probably the main fault of it. Some stories are very random as well, but random in a good way. This was the type of random that doesn't necasarrily makes sense.

The story was liner and pretty short, and took at least a minute or so to beat. I didn't like the choices, which weren't plentyful. I feel as though, if you're trying to drive out a funny/random story, at least make it long, but this was short and in a couple of minutes you would have gone through the whole thing.

The plot was a whole 'nuther thing. Very strange and very confusing, too random for my liking, and too random to sort of understand it. For example, I walk out of the room, and then this happens:

"...and at that moment two jet-pack equipped bank robbers fly out of a pie, and take all of your money."

...what?

Also, at the "good" ending where it told you it would make sense of the plot, it didn't give me any knowledge besides the fact that the old man died. This didn't contribute to the understanding of the plot, as far as I am concerned.

The last thing I wanted to talk about was the writing. Riddled with grammatical, puncuational, etc mistakes which are very bland in the open. this really should be proofread.

It didn't make much sense, it was increasingly random, very liner with not so many choices to do, easily get all endings/choices in a couple of minutes, writing was bad...

I give this a 4/8.

The crude humour threw me for a loop.
Ummm, not sure what to say about this, except, spell-check yourself, try to add a linear-type of story
- even though it's a CYOA -
and don't just add random stuff to be random.
Good though?

I thought it was hilarious I went through a bunch of times just to see what other things happened. It was so random and weird that it was actually fun. I would give it a 8/10 I personally really enjoyed your humor and found this story hilarious

sooooooooo boring!

Each page was very short, there kept being comments about the author being bad, and the choice between 2 doors with 3 options had 2 of them send you back.

3 for the humour.

noice

I would not even publish this because it makes no sense. It doesn't have a plot to it. Now if you wanted to work on the next one a little more, I would gladly help.

This game was random and doesn't make much sense.