Player Comments on Zeroes and Ones

This did not feel very funny at all. :c It felt like some guy is yelling at me about how the world should be.

There was... some sort of conflict with the virus and revenge thing, but it wasn't amusing. Otherwise, a storyline is almost completely rejected. I didn't understand what was happening and WHY.

There was 0 description, 0 background (unless you count the protagonist having the skill to - what was it - infect computers or something?), and broken grammar. I mean, some places were... okay, but it kind of hurt my eyes... >~>

Oh, and remember: We don't like pages with all but one link leading to death (or all leading to death) because it makes the story way linear.

While, yes, I understand the point of the story, the quality of it needs some enhancement. Work on punctuation, details, and background.

The adventure tries to combine Hollywood hacking and internet 1337... While using extremely bland humor and insta-deathlinks.

This type of game- The PICK WHAT THE AUTHOR WANTS OR DIE- type of game is highly fustrating to play, this is a CYOA, it wasn't supposed to be so linear. It gets bad from the point where you get to pick Revenge, Ice Cream, or toilet. Now toilet doesn't do anything beside adding another useless link in the game, with Ice Cream, you get arrested because all you did was hacking A TOASTER, now only Revenge is the correct choice. Why did you add those useless links anyway if you wanted us to pick Revenge? This carries on to the rest of the game, good god.

Deathlink issues aside, the game tries too hard to be funny. It's like some 12 year old freshly graduated from meme school and went here to do his magic. At least it didn't have grammar and spelling mistakes. (if 1337speech doesn't count.)

If you are aiming to make this game as fustrating as possible, then I'd suggest leaving it this way, but if you want it to have the characteristics of an actual CYOA game, then give us more options on what to do that changes the plot without killing us, over and over.

Somehow I get the impression that this game taught Ryder everything he knows about hacking. ^_^

This had practically no plot, though that might just be because it’s so short. I also am aware that it’s meant to be funny. But if it was really just a humor story, why can’t I hack the President? It would be more fun than my neighbor. I have reason to suspect that this was written by a second grad boy.
4/8

This storygame is kinda pointless. It's failing to be funny, and is obviously not proofread. :(

This WOULD be a great story, but a somewhat unrealistic ending in multiple locations kinda ruined the allusion of a good narrative.

This was poop. Pure and simple.

I rated it as such.

If you're trying this hard to be funny, you're probably better off being a prop comedian.

Sigh.
This story better be taken down. It's clear that no effort was put into it. A linear story mixed with an annoying MC mixed with several grammatical errors just made this an awful read.

Fell asleep reading it.

...Linear. Very linear.

Why can't I choose what I want to do? I have to do exactly what the author wants, NO EXCEPTIONS!

Was it supposed to be funny? One point was, the 'mwahahaha' thing. Other than that, a little annoying.

Still a little fun, I suppose...

3/8

I won this is amazing

Pretty good i lost instantly the first time, but than i won the next time

The maturity is real.

like i always say the best offense is a good defense

That didn't make much sense and was ultimately pointless. 2/8.

Yay I got rich but this is a very linear story

Goddamit OmniCorp.

Nice little laugh with each paths.

The rating I gave was a perfect description of of the story.
"choose your own boredom." Every "Wrong choice" left me with death or imprisonment. Kind of boring. 3/8

As I play this game again I laugh.

I realize how funny yet pathetic this storygame truly is.

:)

this game was not too bad for a laugh, isn't that what we all need? right? RIGHT?

I can just smash my screen in anger right now. . .

Take that Evil Cat Lady of Doom! Yeah, what your toaster said!

Only one good ending and too reminiscent to a certain path in Ground Zero. I mean, minus getting into a weird relationship with a handful of other people hidden away in private bunkers and having to fight some lesbian hacker after you inadvertently steal her girl.

Very short and slightly amusing. Needs a lot more depth

I have been #rekt.

Im rich :D

:P I became really rich!

The writing and presentation felt too silly and not serious for me to take the game seriously.

The concept is interesting I guess...

Mostly I agree with Kiel, it's not bad and it's not great. It's... interesting to see the world from a hacker's perspective but the tremendous enthusiasm in the writing didn't really translate to me as I didn't really feel I was a hacker. It wasn't immersive but if it had been I think it probably would have lost the comedy... as random adventure go I guess this was one of the better ones :)

i am rich!!! *LAUGHS* OKAY STOP LICKING ME, DOGGY!

It's certainly better than a lot of...other new games. It's not a bad concept to work with, but this story needs a lot more fleshing out and a lot less "hack teh robots!1!!!1" stuff. Just spend some more time thinking about the stories and writing them out, and you'll be well on your way.

If you say in your story that your story is cliche, you may have a problem. It was short, light on text, the plot was ... *shrug* better than some stories, but it doesn't really stand out imho. I didn't dislike it and it wasn't bad for a first try, but you'll need some improvement if you want to get anything featured or really get noticed.