Agstand, The Dramatist
Hi I'm Agstand, sometimes called Ag
In this story you play as Ben Higgins, a reclusive man who is forced to go out into the world after his sister disappears. Will you be able to find her?
You are Linda Niles, a popular 19 year old singer enjoying life until you get kidnapped during a meet and greet. Try to escape and maybe even try to find the truth behind your kidnapping.
When an old friend disappears, Ben Higgins must once again enter a dangerous underworld.
NOTE: It's recommended you read Siblings first.
Recent PostsDraw My Attention (Reign of the Mini-King) on 6/25/2017 5:01:17 PM
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1. bam badaboom bada bow
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5. Y U NO GIVE HAPPY ENDING?
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6. dis was sahh funneh lawl
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8. can you put some sex in it
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9. needs more vivid, romantic, luscious and in depth sex scenes with demons... like anal... and how it smells
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10. i finished it in under minute
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Draw My Attention (Reign of the Mini-King) on 6/16/2017 8:05:28 AM
I probably screwed something up, I'll try posting them again
Draw My Attention (Reign of the Mini-King) on 6/16/2017 7:57:19 AM
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1. Creature 2
ts a ggame a littel to short good no less
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Riddles on 6/13/2017 7:24:47 PM
ok I got it this time, a train
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One sentence description on 6/9/2017 10:16:58 AM
Stockholm Syndrome- A person is kidnapped and is very cool about it because why not?
Siblings- A guy with no friends looks for missing sister and shoots some people in the process.
Draw My Attention (Age of Banning) on 6/8/2017 4:59:49 PM
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Many, many issues with this storygame.
First of all, I saw about half a dozen spelling and grammar mistakes (such as "freinds," and not "friends."), which really takes away from the overall writing.
Then, there was a sudden font change. Why did you suddenly make a transition to comic sans on like, one of the last pages? It's an annoying font, and the transition has no purpose.
It was completely illogical at many points. Why did you put this in modern adventure? This fits into like, horror more than modern adventure.
Some of the characters were well developed, and I could feel emotion for them (which is rather impressive since the storygame was rather short and didn't have a lot of words in general), but other characters seemed to be just thrown in for the purpose of just having more characters.
The dialogue was also screwed up multiple times throughout this storygame.
Spend more time writing in general. This needed more plot development as well, and maybe a more fleshed out setting.
I'll say 3/8. You've got potential.
-- MinnieKing on 5/25/2017 11:32:56 PM
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add war tag.
Draw My Attention (New Age of Sage) on 3/4/2017 4:56:34 PM
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I'm not 100% sure if this meets the new standards for featured comments, I'll leave it up to you
I see a trend over here...
You seem to be an aficionado for this specific writing style of yours. Start off with introducing the protagonist, some rather plain blocks of descriptive text, and slowly rise to a crescendo of literary excellence.
This style is well and good for me, but you might repulse some readers because they think the story is boring or something like that. Just saying.
Anyway, like your other story, there were still some spelling errors and whatnot. Please do think of a proofreader-for-hire in your next stories.
Negatives aside, it was nicely done. The story was moderately long, and the plot is okay, with enough choices to keep me and most others entertained. You got a lot of potential here, Ag.
Good job. Will drop all cents here. 6/8.
-- AgentX on 3/1/2017 4:55:39 PM
Draw My Attention (New Age of Sage) on 3/1/2017 4:54:35 PM
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1. Beat it yay!
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