Ghost House

Even if this was your first storygame, I'm not holding back on this one. I feel offended by the sheer amount of abbreviations in this storygame. The one I saw the most was "thru", and that really irks me. This is a writing website, and such use if language is an insult to our community. Storygames like these need to go before they taint our site.

The writing is a mess, and I find it really difficult to focus on the storygame itself because of how poorly written it was. There wasn't even really an idea behind it at all. There no plot, so that makes this even worse. I hate storygames where I click two or three links and it's over, so that's dropping your rating as well.

Honestly, if I wanted to read shit like this, I'd just head over to Kingskills and have him write me a novel. I wouldn't be surprised if this dickfart of a storygame was actually written by him. Half of the words in this are spelled incorrectly, abbreviated in an annoying way (like you're texting your friend and you're so lazy you don't feel like typing the whole word), or just completely unrecognizable. Grammar is also a big issue and this needs to be fixed immediately.

I'd just like to add the fact that adding an option to kill myself is just retarded.

1/8

Not good. Very very not good.

This "storygame" is a mess. Grammar and punctuation are horrible, and it completely distracts from whatever the story should be. This is written like it is supposed to be funny, but it's not. AT ALL.

Overall, story is bad and probably not even worth the effort I put into this review.

THIS IS TERRIBLE end of story

It's alright. That's the word I'd use to describe it. You need to use better grammar PLEASE. That would give you a better rating. I found myself skipping words while reading. It's not bad, but not great.

Killed myself at any chance I got. Great game you got here. :)

Love how like the second option you get ever is to kill yourself...

Grammar errors. I liked the humor. The story needed more details in order not to be confusing. Perhaps more choices could have been offered.

Man I would have killed myself too. Reading that was awful.

Oh God. Please proofread and edit. The spelling, punctuation, and grammar are bad enough that they impair the reader's ability to understand the text.

Lots of good humor, I believe this probably the only story that I wanted to find all the deaths in because they were so funny. There are some spelling and grammar errors but nothing to egregious. There isn't much here but what is here is pretty good.