I've just published my first storygame: http://chooseyourstory.com/Story/The_End_of_Your_Life.aspx
I've seen stories on this site that just leave me in absolute awe, and I know I can't write anywhere on that level, but if you could find time to read it I'd appreciate if you could leave a comment with your thoughts just the same. It would help me to know if anyone enjoyed it or if there's any obvious thing I need to focus on to improve.
Just a note: you will die a lot. That's by design, the main character starts off in a very dangerous and unfair situation.
Well I'll take that all as mostly a good thing, and I hope you'll be able to leave a comment on the story later.
I know it could be better, my writing ability is just nowhere near some of the other authors here. It was supposed to be a much bigger story a couple of friends were going to help me with, but they never got started on their segments so I just worked in the main endings from some of what we planned.