I suspect that by the end of today, barring any unforeseen circumstances, my next storygame should be ready for proofreaders to start having a crack at it.
By which I mean: The story is not complete, but there will be enough material for someone to review over the next couple weeks, without the need to feel rushed. And, hopefully, this will motivate me to keep busy and complete the remaining story branches.
The story called Secret of the Grass Planet. It is the sequel to Marooned on Giri Minor, and will be substantially longer (approximately 60,000 words). It is sci-fi, completely story-based (i.e. no stats, no items), and will probably have over 40 unique endings by the time I'm finished.
@ShoujoAddict has already expressed an interest. But if there are one or two other writers who will have some free time in the coming weeks, shoot me a PM. I'm looking for spelling/grammatical errors obviously, but also feedback on the story itself. My plan is to make 2/3 of the story available here on CYS by the end of today, with the final third to be completed (hopefully) later in July.
Procedurally (since I've never tried this before) I'm guessing all I have to do is share a link to the story with the unfortunate victims happy volunteers? If I do that, they will have access to read the story?
I do have it on sneak peek.
Cool! I’ll get to it soon. I’m really hyped for the story
Thanks. I just sent you the link.
I saw this thread so i made an account, i hope you wouldn't mind if i may also have a crack at it. been lurking for a short while.
No response eh?
Seriously, of all the things to do on CYS, it was my request for a couple proofreaders that finally convinced you to create an account?
Just curious to know why. (And welcome, by the way.)
Not quite, I've been wanting an account since i crash landed here a couple of days ago, but i held out until i saw this. When i saw this, i though this is great, an opportunity for me to give myself a name, and for people to i guess know who i am. Plus, i have trouble starting stories and such, so if i read something that is current, it may give me an idea for my own story (Not copying you of course, more like inspiration).
And thanks for welcoming me, i hope the people will like me, so ill focus on giving myself a name.
Fair enough. I sent you a link to the storygame.
Your contribution has been... um... how shall we say?
Yes. That is precisely the word I've been looking for. Is your attention span measured in nanoseconds or something?
To quote someone else: "You're fired."
I suspect these are words you will hear frequently in life.
Yes, my apologies on that. I have been... Tied up, between End's contest and the 10 more tropes i have to find (thanks crick). tl;dr Oh well, maybe next time.
Like there will be a next time...
This was volunteer work was it not? If i didn't have so much going on i would have done it. Sorry to have disappointed you.
Yes, I was asking for volunteers. But it demonstrates your (lack of) character when you say you will do something, and then go fucking around the forums instead.
And I wanted to make sure everyone here gets to see the loser you are. It's not a matter of my disappointment, but your shame.
Lol. That's great stuff.
He offered to help, and since no one else had done so I figured I had nothing to lose from accepting that offer. It's not like this is derailing my plans to finish the story. However, I did assume* that on a website full of readers and writers there may have been a bigger pool of people looking for a way to contribute.
And I should mention that @ShoujoAddict has been awesome in reviewing the first 2/3 of the text. According to his(?) profile, he's still a relative noob too.
I try not to pre-judge. I'll give anyone a chance to either live up or live down to my expectations. If they do the first, I try to give credit where credit's due. If they do the second... well, I see no reason to keep my thoughts to myself.
* Yep, I remember the whole "ass / u / me" thing. No need to remind me on that.
Thanks! Tbf the storygame is extremely interesting, so I just wanted a chance at reading your latest works, and helping you by proofreading is just an added bonus to that, I guess :-p
Now if only authors/game devs could give me special early access to their soon to be released books and games, on account of rooting out bugs/typos...
Anyway, just wanted to inform that I’ve read through what was added.
(Oh and it’s ‘her’ not ‘his’)
Awesome! Thank you! I got your notes, and I will address them soon.
Actually, it makes perfect sense. On weeknights during the school year, all the kids hang out here to avoid doing their homework.
Lol yeah, the next day when teacher asks;
“So...what were you doing yesterday again, instead of doing your homework ?”
“Reading literature, to improve my creativity and writing skills.”
“Oh wow, what were you reading? I would love to see a short summary on it.”
“Sure thing!” Proceeds to loudly explain the whole class a summary of love sick.
Who knows? Maybe the teacher would be into that kind of thing. Educators aren't robots, after all.
It's like all the proofreaders have unionized or something. Can't get a decent day's work out of them anymore.
Thanks. I'm planning to forego my usual weekend activities this week so that possibly/maybe, there might be a finished product to publish two weeks from now.
Just don't tell my dog, because she's itching for a long hike.
I wouldn't mind giving it a look over if you wanted.
Ya ya, but look. It's not that I dislike reading storygames. I'm just not a big fan of the super hero theme. Also hell is a good motivation to write, and that review seems a little easy. In any case I will PM you in about a week with my thoughts on it.
Not sure why you aren't just doing the easiest thing and writing a glowing review of one of my stories.
Umm... thank you for applying for the position, but I think next time you might want to select some better character references.
Kidding aside, the timeframe for proofreading the story would be very tight right now, as I am working toward the goal of publishing this in the coming days.
As it turns out, the twin contests by End and Mizal have been good motivations for me to write... because otherwise "Grass Planet" will get buried in a landslide of contest entries.
And I have a strong desire to move on, anyway.
In the meantime, though, you can read and review my previous story: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/marooned-on-giri-minor