Alpha Wolf

Player Rating6.26/8

"#41 overall, #7 for 2007"
based on 594 ratings since 11/03/2007
played 24,477 times (finished 735)

Story Difficulty6/8

"wandering through the desert"

Play Length7/8

"It keeps going and going"

Maturity Level7/8

"anything goes"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 18. If this were a movie, it would probably be R.

Old monsters never die, they just get meaner.

Additional Notes:

There are history links for each monster (In the form of your character's memories) and while not neccessary to understand the story, they do provide deeper background. Ignore whatever you might know about various old movie monsters, you'll find that most of their histories are much different in this story.

You may find that this story has a movie feel to it which is appropriate considering the characters involved. The langauge (and violence) can get graphic sometimes, so if you don't like that sort of thing, you probably shouldn't read it.

Finally this isn't really a "win/lose" type story, however there are definitely good/bad/neutral endings. A few endings are even "really good" though they won't be spelled out as such.

Player Comments

I really liked this one, though it doesn't feel like it has the depth of world building as some of your other stories, I find there is a lot of charm to your rendition of our classical horror figures and how they have become immersed in the 'real' world. I found all the history pages were well worth the read even though they imparted no choices.
-- Mynoris on 12/22/2017 7:45:57 PM
A truly enjoyable experience. While I was sad to be a past-my-prime wolf, I really felt the enjoyment of getting back into the fight with my character. Although I must say you tend to make me be a man so often I think I'm growing an extra body part.
-- Skysworne on 7/28/2013 1:15:36 AM
The memories addition added a lot. It felt like a story with different scenarios more than a game, but there's nothing wrong with that, and for its purposes, it worked out well. The game seems like a bit of a tease, learning about all these monsters, but not really getting involved in the world. (At least the playthrough that I experienced) Thanks for putting so much thought into this game's characters.
-- Melike on 4/4/2008 12:50:48 AM
Very funny!
-- Quorrah on 7/15/2018 8:44:30 PM
Could be longer.
-- First day here on 7/5/2018 11:26:46 AM
i enjoyed this story i'm not sure if this was the really good ending or not but i liked it
-- reaperzone on 6/23/2018 11:08:03 PM
pretty good, kinda short tho.
-- chimichanga on 6/6/2018 7:19:33 PM
To start this review, I first need to address the distracting, obvious comma errors littered throughout the story.

'“You’re getting old Wolf” you say to yourself like you always do while trying to look on the bright side that at least you don’t have the mange.'

There should be a comma before "Wolf," and also right after it. It should read, '"You're getting old, Wolf," you say to yourself like you always do.' Furthermore, the following sentence is somewhat confusing in that there is no comma connecting the two related action sentences. A corrected version of paragraph is below:

'"You're getting old, Wolf," you say to yourself like you always do, while trying to look on the bright side that at least you don't have mange.'

I notice there's a chronic case of "missing comma syndrome" throughout the entire story, such as in this paragraph:

"After eating some left over mutton in the fridge and some Gummy Blobs (for the sugar “pick me up”) you ponder how you’re going to pay this month’s rent on your cabin."

Remove the parentheses, and you should see how much of a run-on sentence this is. I'm not one to just nitpick in my reviews, however, and so now I'd like to discuss some of the more positive elements of the story.

The characterization of the side characters are just exaggerated enough to paint a vibrant picture of the world they inhabit. When the Wolf first calls Erik, I was confused as to why an employment agent would be so mopey, but only after he mentioned Christine did it click to me that this was the Phantom of the Opera! The "Memories" pages utilize the CYOA format just well enough to accomplish something traditional novel writing is unable to, and that's mass-exposition dumps. Codex-style entries are usually only accomplished in video games, and, as CYOAs are "storygames," you took that principle to heart and used it to craft a better picture of the world.

(A tiiiiny nitpick about Erik! The Phantom never made a deal with the Devil, that was a theme introduced in a very awful adaptation of the original source material. Even in the original movies his deformity was natural, and his success in opera was the one thing that made him redeemable. He was the embodiment of the starving artist, a character who became so devoted to his music that it was his life, yet left his other emotional needs unfulfilled.)

There's of course, eh, the sex scene... which I'd rather not get into. I was confused as to who Mary was. Mary as in, Mary Shelley? I believe whoever she was, she was meant to be the Bride of Frankenstein, but the Bride is left unnamed in any original source material.

Now, I must note that it's strange for the protagonist, the Wolf, to be explicitly stated as NOT Lawrence Talbot, yet he still somehow knows characters such as Griffin or Dr. Jekyll. That was strange, to be honest, since Lawrence Talbot is the Wolfman typically associated with those characters, but I suppose this is an original take on the universe so I'll let that slide.

As for the Mr. Hyde arc, I'm guessing he's so much bigger because of the enhanced formula? Because Mr. Hyde in the original source material is not any bigger than Jekyll; in fact, he's smaller, to represent the twisted nature of evil.

Finally, I'd like to close off with a brief ending statement. As fun as this was, is it really a Horror game? I feel like it should belong in fanfiction, right? It's using already established characters and, even if they are horror-genre characters, wouldn't that make it fanfiction?

Anyways great game, 7/8.
-- henshaw_13 on 5/27/2018 5:12:33 PM
this was good and dude it was okay but you write better than the storygame escape room two and i rated yours a six and it was nice horror
-- i am not bored on 3/16/2018 10:48:17 AM
The first time I read this story was probably two years ago.
I remember going to read 'just one more branch' at 3:00 AM, New Year's Day.

I like the mad scientist branch in particular.
-- Cricket on 2/16/2018 12:50:43 AM
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