Another Damn Wolf Story

Player Rating4.68/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 20 ratings since 12/29/2018
played 162 times (finished 25)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length5/8

"Not going to lose any sleep"

Maturity Level3/8

"must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.
I have no idea why I wrote this. All I can say in my defense is that it seemed like a good idea at the ti--wait no that's a lie, I said, repeatedly that this was stupid and shameful every time I mentioned working on it.

The truth is I needed to publish something before the end of the year and there is CLEARLY a burning need for wolf stories in the psyche of children using the internet. But then they write them badly, or make their wolves behave like clans of cats. So here is a simple straightfoward story of a young wolf leaving his pack in search of a better life. Maybe no one will ever feel the need to write another one now, or if nothing else maybe this will give them ideas for how to do it in slightly more minimum-standards-meeting ways.

Player Comments

From the start, it seems like this was a story that Mizal wrote just to kill time and hopefully the idea of badly written wolf stories.

The story doesn't spend a lot of time helping the player relate to the protagonist. That turns out to be unnecessary because the player relates to the situations the wolf gets into if not the wolf. The story does a good job of keeping the plot flowing so that the player is thrown into the thick of things and never really gets a chance to slow down.

I also like how the scenarios are set in relatively few yet descriptive words. Nothing is wasted. It seems like a relatively small thing to be applauding, I appreciate a writer that understands the difference between writing descriptively and using filler.

The branching paths are fairly logical for the harsh life of a wolf. Those looking for a clean, feel good ending for the wolf should read "The Boy Who Cried Wolf"...and this story. Some of the endings aren't brutal.

I was not pleased to see many factual things about wolves were omitted such as being able to talk to people as plot devices, having weird interspecies romances with teenage girls, and also being spiritual guardians of nature.

However Mizal perfectly captured the struggle of the inner wolf. Every wolf must struggle with the man inside of them threatening to break free and force civility on them. It's a monstrous fate for any wolf that fails.

In all seriousness, I enjoyed the story. The only criticism I have is that it's not meaty enough. Given Mizal's likely self-flagellation as she wrote this, I don't see her fleshing this story out more. All people looking to write a wolf story should use this as a reference tool/starting point.
-- Tyrannosaurusrex on 12/31/2018 2:45:10 PM with a score of 0
Interesting and well-written, I found myself not reading a story about a wolf, but living it. The experience of the wolf became my own. I howl as I type, more beast than man.

Not really, but it was a good go.

There were several things that I liked about this storygame. The breadth of language used in the writing prevented it from getting stale and repetitive. There were times when I had to double check google to make sure certain terms were used correctly and was delighted to find that they were. So thanks for the lesson.

I liked the diversity of the story and endings. I believe I played through them all, but it's possible that I missed one, somewhere. I was a little too amused, possibly, by the weredude ending. The absurdity and break from the otherwise solid continuity of the story gave me a chuckle.

I like when a story takes on the subjective perception of the protagonist and this story does that well. Writing things not as they are, but as they appear to be can make a mundane experience exciting and fresh.

This leads me to some of the issues in your story. There were times when there was a break from your standard subjective descriptions. Calling out human-specific objects by name, such as bullets and shorts, doesn't jive with your prominent method, such as metal beasts and black rivers.

There were a few small hits on grammar, but overall it was very solid. I noticed an inconsistency with your links from page to page. Some pages included punctuation on the links, while others with similar links (such as ones describing actions) did not. A near-imperceptible inconsistency, but with a proven author, it's something worth noting.

This storygame was respectable, if a little dry in terms of plot, but considering your intent with this game, more effort was put into it than I expected. There were no magic wolves with wings that you gave cool scars, so that is something that you are going to have to live with for the rest of your life. Other than that, it was some good tongue-in-cheek fun.


wow cool story 8/8!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (since I guess that is what we are doing)
-- OriginalClamurai on 12/30/2018 3:35:11 AM with a score of 0
This has inspired me to write a wolf story, thank you for giving me such a wonderful idea!
-- Austinc on 1/9/2019 12:32:07 PM with a score of 0
This is actually really well-written, which is hilarious given the topic! Mizal, you proved your point.

You used descriptive words was excellent. That said, you could have put more emphasis on smell and sound. Canines rely on their ears and noises much more than their eyes.

Your gag epilogue were great, too.
-- 3iguy on 1/3/2019 3:32:47 PM with a score of 0
w0w k00l $t0ry m8
-- choking on chicken on 12/31/2018 9:03:53 PM with a score of 0
Clam has already said what had to be said, so

wow cool story 8/8!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
-- undr on 12/31/2018 7:18:40 AM with a score of 0
wow cool story 8/8!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
-- Chris113022 on 12/30/2018 10:47:42 PM with a score of 0
wow cool story 8/8!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
-- Ogre11 on 12/30/2018 1:53:28 PM with a score of 0
wow cool story 8/8!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
-- WouldntItBeNice on 12/30/2018 12:34:10 AM with a score of 0
wow cool story 8/8!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
-- mizal on 12/29/2018 11:15:46 PM with a score of 0
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