Conquest: Chapter I

Player Rating3.65/8

"#435 overall, #44 for 2011"
based on 194 ratings since 07/06/2011
played 2,446 times (finished 210)

Story Difficulty4/8

"march in the swamp"

Play Length3/8

"A nice jog down the driveway"

Maturity Level3/8

"must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.

The beginning of the Conquest series. A Serious/Minorly Humerous game of the Arts of magic, war, and more. You play as the average disturbed child who always had that spark of magic in them, who's mom is dead and father is too damn busy to give a shit about anything. You want something to do, and you think of the thing you have wanted since you began to think of that sort of thing, Taking over the land of Nul. My first adventure game. (Warning, MANY ways to die.)

Player Comments

There's many good things about this storygame that made it very enjoyable, but there were also a few downsides.

One thing I did not like was that it was another chapter one with no chapter two or three or anything. Please, publish a complete storygame, because I want to know what happened and how it really ended, and not just part of a storygame.

Like October said, I liked how there were multiple endings, because it's a nice change of pace to have branching and actual choices in a storygame.

The length was nothing special, but there were quite a number of links and pages and there was quite a bit of writing.

However, I did not like how it was a bit linear. Sometimes I was a bit cofused because it was hard to understand what was going on with the transitions from one event to another.

-- MinnieKing on 3/21/2017 8:48:34 PM
I like that you've included multiple endings in this storygame, and choices that lead to different outcomes. This is how storygames should be, however unfortunately it's not always the case on CYS.

With that said, there was a lot wrong with this.

The grammar is dodgy. To give just one example, in the sentence, "There was a Great War that once plagued the land when it was once worth something, now its like the giant version of a New York allyway, nothing but trouble." you use "its" instead of "it's", misspell "alleyway", and use the word "once" twice. You also capitalise "Great War" and refer to it as "a Great War" rather than "the Great War", suggesting that a Great War is a name (like World War II for example) rather than a description of a big war - this is okay, but you proceed to not give any details about this Great War, which leads me to my next point.

You leave a lot unexplained. What happened in the Shayr War? Who are all these characters you're introducing?

The choices sometimes lead to unexpected and unlikely consequences. Clicking on "get a job" gets you killed for looking at a gem. How is the reader meant to foresee this happening?

Finally, what is a car doing in a fantasy storygame?
-- October on 3/3/2013 1:14:14 PM
To be honest I kind of find it annoying when games are short because they're separated into chapters, (unless of course they're all really long chapters.) Also I was real confused half way through, 'cos the game had demons and necromancers and penniless street urchins, so I kind of assumed it was a high fantasy game. Then the demons threw me in their car, so apparently I was wrong.
-- Briar_Rose on 11/20/2012 3:08:04 PM
Has the basis for an interesting story, but lasts like 5 minutes. Would rather have a complete saga or long chapter than this little background info excerpt. I did get the searcher ending, wasn't too hard. Really just left me feeling incomplete everything was short with little detail, couldn't get into it much.
-- Zdudezy on 5/12/2017 6:43:38 AM
Really inventive make 2 now
-- Jacob on 3/30/2017 1:08:55 AM
The back story and era needs a little working on. There's little description, but I suppose the story is okay.
-- Crescentstar on 6/28/2016 11:54:56 AM
Very Intresting little short and hope #2 comes sooner than later
-- The_Dungeon_Master on 2/28/2016 12:40:28 AM
I just chose random choices and I won >.<
-- CurseOfTime on 2/18/2016 7:12:48 PM
On my first try, I got a random death by trying to get a job.
-- TheBossWriter on 12/19/2015 6:02:06 PM
Too easy
-- AthenaT on 4/19/2015 2:51:26 PM
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