Cougar Crossing: Imminent Threat
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"wandering through the desert"
"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"
"must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.
Just minding your own business...
This story is pretty random, and a leaves a lot of questions to the reader that it shouldn't. What is this clubhouse that you speak of? Where am I? Who am I? Where did a bunch of Cougars come from?
I think that this story should be properly worded better as well, so as to not leave those questions to the reader.
Its a very strange plot, where apparantly a bunch of cougars attack your "clubhouse". I think that, although there were multiple endings, the writing/plot wasy short enough and it could be extended in more ways than one. For example, adding more choices could have helped. I liked the garage scene where you had to guess the code as well, although it was pretty obvious once you got "3" and "1" where it would go. Its a simple pattern, but I guess that's as to not frustrate the reader. However, leaving some clues in other areas as to the password would help. Also, having more scenes (whcih I guess adds onto the "more choices") would also further the story, which would leave the reader with a better end feeling.
The writing was at least good enough. I caught some mispellings and other grammatical errors, but it was better than most with 4/8-and-below ratings.
-- Fazz on 8/4/2014 5:44:25 PM
on 1/31/2018 6:20:26 PM
I got the jailed-but-not-eaten-by-cougar ending
on 2/19/2017 1:15:00 PM
I might be in jail for slaughtering cougars, but at least I wasn't eaten by one!
on 1/1/2017 11:47:08 PM
Very funny and adventurous.
on 8/9/2015 5:41:52 PM
Pretty funny story! Yes, of all the things that you described, I would probably throw the stapler. One issue I did have was with the looping of the story. I think I ended up throwing 3 staplers at the same cougar because I went back into the clubhouse. Maybe a different sequence of events?
on 7/19/2015 10:08:41 PM
Oops, I forgot to make the old, redneck "they ain't too endangered if they're in my house joke".
on 3/29/2015 7:33:44 PM
This is bad. Very bad. I laughed at the idea of a cougar being attracted by a deer picture inside a drawer, though.
on 3/28/2015 1:23:41 PM
Sort of okay.
on 10/13/2014 2:56:20 PM
Uhhh fun I guess? The best ending is jail?
on 8/27/2013 7:29:45 PM
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