"Too few ratings to be ranked"
played times (finished )
"trek through the forest"
"A nice jog down the driveway"
"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.
A story about persistence.
~This story was inspired by The Flame, by urnam0~
I just found this game from looking at Sentinel's points and boy is it awful. It's not even a CYOA. See, the main thing about CYOAs is that they have CHOICES. This is just an endless loop. Even some meaningless choices would let it qualify as a CYOA, but you didn't even include THAT!
Supposedly there's a secret ending if you keep walking, but I'm not even going to bother. The writing was crappy. You painted absolutely no image of the hallway. At first I thought it was some long, eggshell colored hallway with no decorations but then you mentioned wallpaper. You need to set a tone that matches with your description! The tone you set was robotic and sterilized, NOT ruined and dark.
I can see why people didn't like your stories now! These are awful! You probably still think your shitty 'Telltale Manor' or whatever story was great, too. That one was posted on ROBLOX though.
You're just shitty.
on 9/25/2016 7:20:33 PM with a score of 0
Well, I am glad that I did't fall for the trick ending!
Running is after than walking.
on 7/29/2016 2:32:04 AM with a score of 0
I meant no choices it autocorrected
on 7/24/2016 9:29:04 PM with a score of 0
There were no chicks in this?
on 7/24/2016 9:28:32 PM with a score of 0
Hah, this is the second story that I've read recently on here that was inspired by a story that I wrote. It is humbling to read a story inspired by one of my own. I liked the (true) ending. I also agree with the other reviewer that this reminds me of The Enigma of Amigara Fault.
on 7/5/2016 9:52:24 AM with a score of 0
Well... this was pretty shit. There were no choices, other than "Just stop playing" or "Keep walking until paramedics reach you". It was just a boring and repetitive game, and the fact that you made it to be repetitive doesn't make it any better, it makes me question why the fuck you made it.
on 7/4/2016 2:07:22 PM with a score of 0
Who the fuck packs extra apples?
on 7/4/2016 12:35:17 AM with a score of 0
Actually, Mizal, it is a CYOA. There's more than one ending. I got the good one (where the paramedics rescue you) ... this game is designed to look like you're not able to get a good ending unless you're very stubborn.
on 7/3/2016 10:19:25 PM with a score of 0
Click the button or die throughout the entire story.
on 7/3/2016 9:22:45 PM with a score of 0
Come for the engima, stay for the faults.
on 7/3/2016 8:33:11 PM with a score of 0
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