Leroy and Mika's Organic Poetry

Player Rating4.69/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 23 ratings since 11/19/2019
played 114 times (finished 28)

Story Difficulty1/8

"no possible way to lose"

Play Length1/8

"Make sure not to blink"

Maturity Level1/8

"appropriate for all ages"
Stories with this maturity level will not, by design, have any potentially objectionable content. An example of a type story with this rating would be a quiz on mathematics.

Let's write a poem together,

about nature or the weather.

Alternating lines, you and me,

 writing in perfect harmony.

I will write a line, you the next,

our lais is a river of text.

Leroy and Mika are parting ways for two years. They have signed up for the Peace Corps and are going to opposite corners of the globe to make a difference in the world. Their shared loves are poetry and the environment. This lais is the perfect poem to remind them what they mean to each other; they just have to write it.

Authors Notes:

A 1,000-word story written for a contest with the theme of nature environment. The game is a craft your own poem game. A lais is a poem written with octosyllabic couplets (8 syllable lines that rhyme in pairs). You get to craft the poem that expresses these two characters' love, and you get to decide if their love is strong enough to survive two years apart.

Actual word count is 936.

A special thanks to  Ogre11 and mizal for proofreading and play-testing! Their feedback was instrumental in making this game what it is.

Player Comments

Thoroughly enjoy it, it's like a gentle aroma of a Citrusy Mock Orange but a bit too cheesy. The lais part could have been better if you give them clearer interactions like one read it to the other then the other share their own little lais to their partner in return for their partner gift. It isn't that bad of a short story but it'll be more pleasant if you give the characters to have more certain feelings to eachother so that the lais could have a greater impact to each characters. I would said the relationship between Leroy and Mika feel more like "Neutral Cheesy" rather than the "Romance" that I am looking for. In conclusion, it is a decent read and it could definitely improve more. 5/8
-- NormPerse on 11/24/2019 6:44:31 AM with a score of 0
Great design and good use of 1,000 words. So in structure and poem flow, I give you a 7. However, the story plot itself is a childish plane boring soap story with two characters that look like a retarded Dick & Jane know Captain Planet. So I give it a five. Well done, far far better than mine
-- poison_mara on 11/19/2019 12:55:19 PM with a score of 0
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