Player Comments on Survive The Apocalypse

Ah yes watching House during a zombie apocalypse truly a cultured man.

I feel like you started strong the first few pages with the detail and length you gave, but then the effort seemed to drop as the choices branched off, which I don't know if it's because you bit off more than you could chew or for some other reason.

It being so short is probably the reason why the overall score is so low along with the reason listed above, still it was fun to read in some areas which makes it something sort of decent while also could of had the chance of being better.

nothing new really added in the zombie genre, just another zombie story.

This was pretty ambiguous to say the least. While it's clear that much thought was put into the writing and structure of the story, the actual story lacks in any actual substance or anything that truly makes it stand out from the rest of the horror games with a zombie setting. It's not bad by any means, and it is just something I simply consider adequate.

So it's quite decent, if only just a bit cliche. But with a genre like the zombie genre, there's not much that one can do that hasn't already been done. So, for what it was this was still a game that had a decent bit of effort put forth to be an enjoyable read.

Okay, there are some serious flaws with the narrative at my house.

My house
The fact that I wake up to my room, as well as the rest of the house, overturned and wrecked. My wife is downstairs and is one of the zombies. This presents a narrative dilemma. First off, how could I have slept through the ransacking of my room? I'm sleeping there, and therefore right next to all the noise that ransacking my room should produce.
Let's say I slept particularly heavily that night. My wife, whom I just found out I even have, is missing. If someone were to try and kidnap her, why am I completely unrestrained? You'd think the kidnapper would try to make this easy on himself.
Then I get downstairs and see my wife for the first time. She's a zombie. If she was in my bed when I went to sleep, then wouldn't I have woken up to being eaten by her? How am I still both alive and unharmed at this point? Thus far, by rights I should be dead or bitten, and the length of this story could thus be easily justified, though not the story itself.

So I find a safe place at the boarded up safe house. When I'm asked to hand over my stuff, I can refuse. These guys don't even try to coerce me. Their initial reaction is to shove me out the door, which I find highly unbelievable. If they really wanted me to give up my stuff, they wouldn't shove me out the door to my death with the supplies on me. It's also very abrupt.

Later, when Rick is holding down Flamingo after I've snubbed him, I am given the option to try and keep the peace. Rick doesn't even take the guy's stuff, he just lets him get up, and then he shoots me. If I take the other choice, which is also ambiguously titled, "help Rick", I hold down Flamingo while Rick shoots him. It seems like a very biased outcome, favoring aggression and zero-tolerance while discouraging peaceful resolution. Why couldn't Rick just take Flamingo's gun and shove him out the door like they would have done to me if I refused to give up my stuff? At least this time they'd have a very good reason for not hesitating.

And just like that, it's over. I don't get to protest the outright shooting of Flamingo, or even try to get away from these guys. Maybe I don't agree with how they do things. We've survived the outbreak, but we haven't ridden out the plague entirely. What about food? What about medicine? What about the people who want what we have and resort to violence to get it? What about the real choices? What if you somehow get bitten? Do you have the balls to ride it out and help as much as you can before you finally have to "bite the bullet," as it were? I'm not on my own anymore, I'm with a group of people whom I may or may not agree with, and may have to choose sides. What about having to decide where you stand on the Donner Party situation?

This survival horror adventure is severely lacking in the "survival" department. Getting to safety is not the same as surviving, especially when you find a group of people to hunker down with. Surviving with a group of people is about the interactions between the individuals, and how you choose to deal with the problems posed by disagreements in the group or troublesome individuals, as well as those who disagree with how you choose to handle things, especially if you choose to be bold and direct.

This is just too short and too shallow.

very nice story but too short

Started with some promise, ended meh.

This game is short and fairly generic for the genre. It started out decent, although very cliche, and looked like the author might have put some effort into providing at least a humorous tale, but this did not really develop. Ended too soon to feel like a good story.

Overall, nothing unique happens here.

its okay but too short

It was good but short

Interesting.

To fast

It's good. There are a few grammar mistakes here and there, you used 2 instead of two, and there were lots of spelling errors, but other than that, good job!

mmmmm..... not to good not the worst

it was cool

Oh gosh. The grammar. The logic. The plot. So horrible.

Pretty good. Needs some honing though.

Good fun but you should use the item feature rather than trusting to our honesty over whether or not we have a particular item :)

A bit short and not much of a plot line. Grammar was good and writing quality was high.

Good I guess but you die whatever you do so kinda sucks.

I liked the story, It was a bit short though...
5/8

Hmm, could be longer. The maturity is a bit off, I would say it's more 4/8 or 5/8.

good, would have been better if it was longer. I loved flamengo's name :D

wait your telling me the guy could just kill his wife that easily with no guilt. He didn't know what was going on it would have more sense if he had run away.

A few mistakes and some pages didnt seem to link up quite right but not bad overall.

okay but I don't get how you run away to the kitchen from your zombie wife and then run into your zombie wife

Your writing's pretty good but I would have preferred if the game had kept track of what items you had instead of having to remember or write them down. My main problem with the game though is that the guy has absolutely zero emotion involved with his wife becoming a zombie and killing her. You'd think he'd have a little sulk to himself for five minutes or something, but nope. Bitch dead, now kill zombies :p

Cool story, but I died XD

pretty good for a beginner needs more diversity though

Seth says MEH! Short, and you are forced to go to the house, but it's ok for your first one. 4/8

It started out well but it was very short and there were very few choices

5/8

it was ok

I won, but it was really short

Really short

Nice first game! Too short IMO! Story had a good flow! Thumbs up!

Not bad, kinda sort and a few too many random ways to get killed.

A good flowing zombie survival game.

not bad, not bad nice first game!

I liked it.

Fun game to play. It was a bit short, but fun nonetheless.

This game was so awsome.

Thanks for the compliments guys! :D I'm not gonna lie, this was for school, and it was kind of half-assed. I had to write this in a book format for the class as well, and it had a page limit, so I was a little limited. But other than this, I know I could have done a lot better with the options and such. I'm thinking of doing either a Star Wars-eqse Sci-Fi story next, or a fantasy, World of Warcraft-esue story. Not so sure, though. Input is highly needed :] But again, thank you for the reviews!

Short

I hate zombie games with a fiery passion.

But for this I'll make an exception. Incredibly well-written.

Great first story, well plotted and non-linear. I'm really impressed. The storyline was generic and boring but you did well for what that is. Next time, use the advanced editor instead of having [if you have bla bla bla] links. Also, formulate a better plot and grow the size of your story. This was much too short. Great first effort and I'm looking forward to reading more :)

It was pretty good.