The Dream Thief

Player Rating5.36/8

"#166 overall, #15 for 2016"
based on 126 ratings since 02/29/2016
played 4,039 times (finished 137)

Story Difficulty8/8

"mosie through a minefield"

Play Length8/8

"Even light has to break at the rest stop"

Maturity Level7/8

"anything goes"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 18. If this were a movie, it would probably be R.

The Dream Thief.

He has left me hurt, humbled, robbed and broken-hearted...but not broken. I'm not going to let you win.

Throw whichever of life's problems you dare at me, I WILL overcome it! You can't take away from me any more - what do I have to lose?

I will fight you, Dream Thief, and I will vanquish you - or die trying.

This story was written in 8 days for the CYS Riddles & Puzzles 2016 Competition.

Second Runner-up: Riddles & Puzzles 2016

Player Comments

I was planning to not comment on your story until after the contest, as my opinion differs from the comments, and I didn't want anyone to judge mine harshly for my opinion on your story. But as you down-rated several games with your recent comments... Here is what I thought about your game, a fair assessment.

A) Writing ability: You clearly have inhuman writing capabilities. By sheer length and writing alone you easily outshone the rest of us. And the scripting was amazing coming from someone who, admittedly, was new at scripting. The fact that it was finished in 8 days, wow. And you were able to post for help in the forums for scripting and even asked for someone to look over the game for you. I happily did this as my own game was nearing completion. I especially found it amazing that a game already so long had two more massive parts plus scripting the very next day. I am speechless...

B) The story itself: It was long, yes. But it was not perfect. There were grammar/punctuation issues here and there. It did not flow smoothly, though. The differences between the different parts made it not jibe right to me. And because of the length, some pages tend to blur together causing it to almost become boring. Just on and on and on. Nothing really to make me like the character, aside from pity that he lost his family...

C) Playability: There were numerous issues with your scripting. I even found some unfinished pages with no links. The forest section particularly had many issues. And the final part came off as very confusing. Also, your walk-through was very hard to read and not easily read or understood. Some of the directions were out of order or missing. It was fairly difficult to navigate. It took me over an hour on the last part of the game alone, just trying to follow the walk-through. Finally, after randomly guessing the last parts (after 33, I believe it was) I finally finished you game. It was not fun to me. It was hard and although long, not always engaging.

D) Puzzles: There weren't many puzzles in your game. Just a couple that I saw in the last scenes. The puzzles themselves weren't easy or fun at all. Sorry, but this is just my personal opinion.

-- Many people may not agree, but hey, that's okay. Everyone is entitled to their opinion. I am honest to a fault, and my own worst critic but I do not down rate anyone for my own gain. Congradulations on your story entry, I have no doubt you will most likely win. Have a great day!
-- breezy134 on 3/5/2016 7:58:22 AM with a score of 0
This game is very impressive. It would have been impressive even if it had been written over the course of a couple months, but the fact that something of this quality could be produced in less than two weeks is frankly mind-boggling. That being said, the time-frame makes any kind of mistakes or oversights much more forgivable, even if most of the problems I have with hastily written storygames are nowhere to be found in this game.

For one, it's not linear at all. In fact, it branches out like a Christmas tree, with so many different paths and outcomes that I probably haven't even found half of them after two hours of playing this. There are a few places that could use a little more polish, but overall, the amount of plotting and writing behind this monster of a plot is staggering.

The 8/8 difficulty rating is absolutely justified, but the game is interesting enough that I kept trying different paths to try and find the solution. A large part of the motivation is just how well-written and compelling the main character is. He has a very realistic condition and a very nuanced personality, with thoughts and emotions that propels the plot forward without ever feeling overdramatic or forced.

The danger that lurks around every corner and the mystery surrounding the plot also ratchet up the dramatic tension and kept me hooked. As I hit dead end after dead end, I really got the feeling that there was something terrifying and dangerous slowly closing in, which was great for a suspense game.

I did have a few gripes with the forest survival section, because it seems rather buggy with pages that were missing links and no concrete way of telling when you would run out of time, although I suppose that might have been intentional to reflect that actual difficulty of surviving in wilderness. For what it's worth, it's a commendable first try at advanced scripting, but I feel like it didn't fully mesh with the style of the rest of the game and would have been better presented in storyline format instead.

Other than that nitpick though, I found the rest of the game thoroughly enjoyable, excellently written, and impressive as hell.

I'm also half-convinced that the writer is some kind of inhuman writing machine with twelve arms and six heads typing on half a dozen different computers simultaneously, because nothing else can explain the ridiculous pace and quality with which this was produced. That's entirely besides the point though.
-- the_quiller on 2/29/2016 2:43:49 PM with a score of 0
wow. that was so much better than I expected. all I can say is just... wow.
the plot was so branched out with all those different choices and the character was so realistic... (although it did seem like more of a modern adventure or something else other than a mystery...)
to be written in such a short time, that's just amazing.
-- AstralEmbers17 on 3/8/2018 10:31:35 AM with a score of 0
Wow, this story was really unexpected. First, I thought this was about a man living with autism, and then it turned much darker. The ending with the homeless people dying was unexpected. I didn't even get any choices after asking for vegetables. Overall, very interesting.
-- MegaUltraChicken on 1/21/2018 11:48:32 AM with a score of 0
dream thief? hell~o, you just created a dream of surviving in the wild and escaping convict with murder, isn't that wild? ;)

(But to be honest though, without the walkthrough, I believe it is impossible for anyone to figure out how to survive either the forest or the village)

Not to mention... your game greatly reminds me of another commercial released role-playing video game developed by Atlus for the PlayStation 3 and PlayStation 4 video game consoles called Persona 5. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=G7U4Ahox93g
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Persona_5
Can't wait for the sequel where you beat up the real monsters. ;)
"Freedom!
As I press on the lever with my bronze sword, it releases, making me vanish from this world. I am momentarily in a black daze resembling the dark matter of our universe, but I am awake.
I open my eyes, to find myself in the same place I was before I fell asleep. Now I just need to not fall asleep or go unconscious in a hurry, and my life will continue..."

By the way, really appreciate the effort you put into creating this game. I learned a bit of scripting and realize how difficult it can be to make all the links work. If you really did make the game in 8 days, you must be a genius! =D
-- TestingJest on 1/15/2018 2:53:54 AM with a score of 500
This is a great story!!!
-- Jesza on 12/3/2017 3:36:02 PM with a score of 0
Well written even though I noticed some grammatical mistakes. Otherwise, the story had a nicely planned out plot, and I enjoyed this book to my heart's content.
-- DiniTheWizard on 11/20/2017 5:17:45 PM with a score of 0
There was such great character development that this story got me crying at the end.
-- _skye_ on 8/23/2017 2:41:57 PM with a score of 0
Decently well-written and a good length. Although I felt that a good portion of the story was more like something that belongs in the Love/Dating or the Modern Adventure category rather than the mystery one.
-- crazygurl on 7/13/2017 3:31:42 PM with a score of 0
Well written, you can really feel everything the narrator feels. No matter how many paths I tried I never found a truly happy ending. Didn't feel like much of a mystery, maybe a modern adventure would fit better, i don't know. It was still a really good story.
-- BigRonn77 on 10/3/2016 3:06:05 PM with a score of 0
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