Player Comments on The Pie
This was a decent story. While I wasn’t the biggest fan of it, I can’t say that the story was bad either, especially for a cys fanfic. I liked how you played as ford looking for some magic crystals, as Ford is an unpredictable site member in general, and he is the perfect candidate for a game like this. While it is good, that is all it is. Nothing more, and nothing less.
I liked the unpredictability of it a fair amount. Most games that are random are bad, though this one is solid. The randomness serves the game well in its endeavors. The writing is good enough to turn this into strength, and makes it better than it would have been otherwise.
The branching wasn’t the best though. The game seems to have tons of super short one choice pages in rows. This is definitely isn’t ideal, and as such you should think about combining a lot of the pages together, and adding more choices. This way there aren’t as many one choice pages in your game, and most pages can matter.
Another aspect of the game is the whole cys fanfic part. I feel it did a solid job getting the tones of most of the site members here down, though as chris said no Tim or Chris made all the difference here.
All things considered I would call this a good game, and a solid fanfic. If read by someone who has never seen the forum it would only be good, though that is not your target audience of course, so I will say for a site fanfic it is solid. It has a nice length, good spelling and grammar, meh branching, good characterization of site personalities, and a hefty dose of randomness. Would I recommend this to someone who has no idea of the sites members? No. Would I recommend it to someone who does? I might.
5 out of 8
on 10/5/2019 2:11:09 PM with a score of 0
Naturally this is the best. The self insert made me giggle.
on 6/15/2019 3:45:55 PM with a score of 0
lol bootyjuice420 uwu what shirt will you wear on your toast??!
on 5/22/2019 6:51:52 PM with a score of 0
First time through, and I reached a page with no links after going up a ladder to kill Karstarck and choosing “stealth”. It says I killed him, but there’s no link except the default “go back or reset” link.
on 1/30/2019 11:52:43 PM with a score of 0
That was a nice little story. Pretty funny. Buuut...
1/8, no Tim and Chris, worst story ever.
on 12/25/2018 3:34:33 PM with a score of 0
Well this was interesting.
But, you called my chickens precious so I have to give it an 8
on 11/7/2018 8:39:33 AM with a score of 0
It was weird. At least I made a cameo. Also, Leora isn't short. Everyone knows that.
on 11/4/2018 5:35:51 PM with a score of 0
I gave it a 1 because you forgot to put the best guy(me) in the story
on 11/4/2018 3:38:43 PM with a score of 0
Had to run through that more than one time. So vastly different were my several experiences, that each path could've been separate stories completely.
on 11/4/2018 3:07:43 PM with a score of 0
Biblical tag is pretty accurate tbh
on 11/4/2018 11:26:46 AM with a score of 0
What the hell did I just read?
on 11/3/2018 2:13:08 PM with a score of 0
Eh, looks like you've found a job as Cystia's unofficial chronicler.
on 11/3/2018 1:27:36 PM with a score of 0
on 11/2/2018 2:36:25 AM with a score of 0
I'm not short.
on 11/1/2018 12:04:12 AM with a score of 0