While My Guitar Violently Weeps

Player Rating3.70/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 50 ratings since 05/14/2013
played 468 times (finished 53)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

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Mark Carpetson is your average urban musician. He plays with a band in the local tavern every saturday night. However, when a mysterious man enters his life, strange and wacky events start to unfold.

Player Comments

Many, many issues with this storygame.

First of all, I saw about half a dozen spelling and grammar mistakes (such as "freinds," and not "friends."), which really takes away from the overall writing.

Then, there was a sudden font change. Why did you suddenly make a transition to comic sans on like, one of the last pages? It's an annoying font, and the transition has no purpose.

It was completely illogical at many points. Why did you put this in modern adventure? This fits into like, horror more than modern adventure.

Some of the characters were well developed, and I could feel emotion for them (which is rather impressive since the storygame was rather short and didn't have a lot of words in general), but other characters seemed to be just thrown in for the purpose of just having more characters.

The dialogue was also screwed up multiple times throughout this storygame.

Spend more time writing in general. This needed more plot development as well, and maybe a more fleshed out setting.

I'll say 3/8. You've got potential.
-- MinnieKing on 5/25/2017 11:32:56 PM
It sucks. You should burn this story. I really hate this. For the future reader,please dont play this, AT ALL.
-- Azuan832005 on 6/6/2017 8:24:24 AM
died on page 3. awesome game
-- Sir Tacoman on 3/3/2015 9:58:41 AM
Well then. I was crushed by a wall. I always wanted that to happen...
-- Catpoptart on 1/19/2015 8:56:40 AM
After a long tiring day of lectures that I was doing at college, this suddenly cheered me up from the boredom of those lectures!
-- Thesaurus on 4/7/2014 1:14:11 PM
it was bad
-- donkey Kong, i like donut on 10/16/2013 9:39:03 AM
You lose points for not formatting dialogue correctly on some pages. It could have used some more editing but the writing itself wasn't bad.
-- ugilick on 5/31/2013 11:06:15 PM
Is there a 'good' ending? If so, I couldn't find it. Not a bad idea, though. Decently written with a hefty amount of typos.
-- AspiringAuthorCook on 5/20/2013 2:45:53 PM
through in some pictures and this could be a great story. Just some shots of a metal band in hell would really help get into the story
-- JamesValkyrie on 5/14/2013 8:45:46 PM
I liked it, I like the way all the people talked it's wickity whack
-- hugo23 on 5/14/2013 8:42:14 PM
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