MicroPen, The Wordsmith

Member Since

8/10/2018

Last Activity

7/16/2020 12:58 AM

EXP Points

266

Post Count

267

Storygame Count

2

Duel Stats

1 win / 0 losses

Order

Warden

Commendations

28

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Trophies Earned

Earning 100 Points

Storygames

A Tale of Theft and Guns

This is a story about Noah. Noah is broke on account of being fired from his job. Now behind on rent and desperate, his friend gives him a job offer that could change his life for better or worse.

Author Note: This story is pretty short, with about 3300~ words. It has 5 endings for you to find, and every choice has an impact on the story. Leave me your thoughts below! Also a BIG thanks to mizal for helping with proofreading.

Paper Slingers
This is the story of you and your crew having to deal with getting ripped off by another crew out to steal your territory. Will you choose war or diplomacy? Will you side with friendship or greed When things get tough will you blow things way out of porption with an horible act? Choose for yourself as these menace's try and invade your newspaper route! Author's note: This is my entry for mizal's into the jungle contest. It was written over the course of 6 days with the proofreading being done an hour before the deadline. So if you see any typo's I blame that despite the fact I should have started way earlier. Please leave a comment, and say what you liked and disliked about the game along with what you rated it.

Kid Money Game
unpublished
This is a game where you try and earn as much money over the summer as you can

Lil Timmy: Halloween Premiere Episode
unpublished

Lil Timmy is mad so he will get his revenge!

Author Note: This story was wrote in 4 hours for a compotition with the theme being spooky. Please keep this in mind when rating


Scripting Test 3158974837
unpublished
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Recent Posts

Serpent's Super Snazzy Ser-views on 7/14/2020 12:57:11 AM
34. http://chooseyourstory.com/story/aenigma-academy I'm not exactly sure how to feel about this game. On one hand it definitely has it's shortcomings. There are many of them, and I will go over them at length later. However there is something about it I just can't place. I'm going to try my best to articulate my thoughts on this story. For starters a lot of the writing, mostly the dialogue, feels… forced. I'm not sure the correct way to describe it but it doesn't feel natural at all. There are also things like how a malnourished thief living on the streets can accomplish the jungle obstacle course. It's not just that the protag can, most of the people at least make it through. That's bullshit, because by the sound of it it is something most people couldn't do even if they trained for it. Now about the three courses. The one I liked the least was the cipher training. I'm not sure what the author expected you to do here. Like I guess you could copy paste every code into decoders. What I personally did, and what I suspect many others did, is just click ever choice until it worked. The one thing I liked about this though is that seeing lorem ipsum made me laugh. It might be the thing I remember most about this game in the long run. The fighting one was pretty standard. Just descriptions about what happened. I enjoyed it. Not much else. Now my favorite one was the logic one. I really liked the puzzles. They were pretty standard, and were easy for me, but I still liked them. I will admit I just clicked through on the last one since that one would have involved me using a piece of paper. It was well designed though. The branching was pretty good. You have the intro, the three trainings, and the end. It is very much a branch and bottleneck. It is pretty good for what it is. In conclusion this story gets a 4/8. The main thing holding the story back is the quality of the writing. I liked the plot, I liked the branching, I just didn't like the writing itself and the polishing errors that happened like spelling and grammar. I think your writing will improve in time and you will write something pretty good. When that day comes I look forward to reading it.

Serpent's Super Snazzy Ser-views on 7/11/2020 7:09:47 PM
It's time for epic things at epic stakes!!! Within the next two weeks, starting tommrow, I will be writing one review for every 2 days. So starting on July 12th, ending on 11:59 PM july 25th I will have finished 7 reviews. If I fail please take 100 points away. The theme for this review sprint is contest stories, or stories by newer writers. Not a hard rule, just an idea. NOW LET REVIEW SPRINT #1 BEGIN!!!!!!!

I’ve Been There Before, I’ll be There Again on 7/7/2020 8:12:32 PM
What are them words? Tone sounds like a commie thing, and Atmosphere sounds like a word those brainwashed people who believe in global warming would use.

Noob Contest Roll Call on 7/6/2020 12:56:57 AM
Fuck me gently with a chainsaw. I hate life. I hope I translated it into english good enough to be passable http://chooseyourstory.com/story/paper-slingers

Newbie Contest Q&A and mainly Enterpride's writeup on 7/5/2020 7:24:12 PM
Dang I was looking forward to mine :(

Blue Whale Challenge on 7/5/2020 6:10:20 PM
How old is your brother?

Halcyon: A Journey (WIP Thread) on 7/5/2020 4:47:13 PM
What about now?

Noob Contest Roll Call on 7/5/2020 3:33:23 PM
I'm trying to finish. It will be tight, but I will pull through!

Noob Contest Roll Call on 7/4/2020 5:15:32 PM
MAME!

Noob Contest Roll Call on 7/4/2020 12:00:22 AM
It looks like a forum notification but it says you were tagged in a post. Like this @AnimalAlien