MicroPen, The Contributor

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Lil Timmy: Halloween Premiere Episode
unpublished

Lil Timmy is mad so he will get his revenge!

Author Note: This story was wrote in 4 hours for a compotition with the theme being spooky. Please keep this in mind when rating


Scripting Test 3158974837
unpublished
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Recent Posts

Serpent's Super Snazzy Ser-views on 1/13/2020 10:02:41 PM
28. http://chooseyourstory.com/story/pitka's-fables This was intriguing. Before I spoil anything, you need to play this game first. Reading a review of it will spoil everything unique about it. So GO PLAY THE GAME. I will tell you right off the bat that it is worth picking up. If you are reading this, then you have some interest in it or the author, so just do it. With that out of the way this game can be split into two parts. The first part is the fables, and the second is the mental breakdown portion of it. While I prefer the latter, they both were very good. The fables themselves were fairly well done. I did go back and read all of them, and I liked them all. My favorite was the sages, but they are all worth a read. I'm not sure if you wrote all the fables, but if you did that is even more impressive. While they all are pretty generic, I like that they focused on a particular theme and were normally pretty short. All in all, not bad. Then there is the depression section. I tend to like the games that introduce meta elements, especially when they are executed well. It sure is a good thing that this story was executed very well. This section makes up a good portion of the story, and nearly all of the branching. The story isn’t very long by any means, but it is enjoyable. In conclusion I like this story. It is well done, and it combines two concepts I enjoy a lot. I have a fondness for fables, and a fondness for games with meta elements. The branching isn’t very vast, but it works for what it is. This is a story you sit down and read. Then you walk away. It is no masterpiece, but it is solid, and sometimes that’s all a book needs.

its me on 1/13/2020 10:00:57 PM
Are you real? What is the meaning of life? Can you make a rock so heavy that you can't lift it? ANSWER ME ALMIGHTY ONE

CYS Mentor Program - (Beta) on 1/12/2020 12:16:59 AM

I guess I'll sign up for mentee. I do want to improve so this could prove benifical, but keep in mind I'm probably going to be the least skilled person who posts in this thread. Just something to keep in mind. 


Serpent's Super Snazzy Ser-views on 1/5/2020 6:15:39 PM

27.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/i-went-to-the-graveyard

 

This was very different than what I expected. The whole game has a very unique branching style I wish I would see more. This idea was brilliant, and since you are a good writer overall the execution is great as well. Before reading this review you should play the game. That means you, you bitch who reads the reviews before playing the game and gets spoiled on them. TLDR this game is worth playing. Now go play it.

 

Starting with the idea, this game takes place in a graveyard. Depending on what you take to the graveyard, and what you do with it, you are one of many characters. I like the setting overall, because graveyards are just interesting. I can’t get too much into the idea without describing what the main draw, at least for me, is, and that is…

 

The branching! I love the branching in this game. Like I said earlier on the first page you pick what you take to the graveyard. You can take a knife, casket, flowers, or a bell. Once you pick your item, you have two options on what to do with it. Then the game is over. Each path is only 3 pages, and what this allows is for the author to create 8 paths, witch are very fleshed out for being 3 pages. All of them felt super complete, and the fact that that is every possible in a game with 9.2k words and 13 pages is astonidening. This game feels like 8 short stories connected only by their setting. While some may not like that, I do.

 

In conclusion, this game is great. The only thing that I’m unsure about is what to rate it. As much as I want to give it a 7, I don’t feel I can. With this length, it is almost impossible to write something worthy of a 7. There just isn’t enough room to work with to get to the necessary level. Though I will say this game is great, and I hope you continue writing.

 


Serpent's Super Snazzy Ser-views on 1/5/2020 5:56:59 PM

Even though the year is over, going to use this thread to see how many reviews I can amas before this account gets banned.

Last Quarter 2019 Total: 26


Year's End Contest - Choose Your Own Prompt II on 1/5/2020 2:55:46 PM

He was thrice shamed, was bestowed a new account out of mercy, and got shammed again.


Year's End Contest - Choose Your Own Prompt II on 1/5/2020 2:53:25 PM

The only death I see here is a suicide.


Burpents Bountiful Ballad on 1/4/2020 4:01:14 PM

1.8k words

13 pages

It is published

It is still shit

I got out of shame

This thread is closed


2020 Resolutions on 1/4/2020 3:49:40 PM

Write something that gets a 4 0


Year's End Contest - Choose Your Own Prompt II on 1/3/2020 11:36:46 PM

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/ballad-of-the-dragon-slayer

 

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