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This is my first story/game I ever made. Criticizing is encouraged.
About the story-
Live in a mind of a wizard in his forties, which somehow got stuck in a dimension worst than hell, though filled with mushrooms. Its also a metaphor for the Labyrinths of choices which are our live, or whatever.
Recent PostsA poem for nostalgia on 6/5/2021 4:23:43 PM
Thanks! I tried to point out missing the memories is like missing water, soil and leaves for a tree in the first section. Things that are basic and necessary for its growth throughout the seasons. Its true, it doesn't flow at all though. Perhaps I'll try to rephrase it while still trying to keep the original meaning intact.
A poem for nostalgia on 6/5/2021 2:01:21 PM
Also, maybe I should have mentioned it in the poem, but its about a tree (hence the talk about roots, soil, leaves, rings, etc...) kept from growing because of his past. Probably too vague now that I view it again.
A poem for nostalgia on 6/5/2021 1:37:34 PM
Where have the good days gone by?
Evergreen leaves flying in the fall
Good soil rotating with the Earth, leaving snow to cover nothing
Water leaking stray, from thin roots to summer's bay
And I, intoxicated by simple feelings, maddening contrasts, and their inevitable return-
Every season pass, my rings stopped forming. Just dreams past, and nothing more.
Hi! I don't post here a lot, but today I felt nostalgic and written a poem about it. English is not my my first language so a help with grammar subtleties will be appreciated. Ideas and criticisms are also welcome (aside from it doesn't rhythm lol).
Break! (The Contest) on 7/28/2020 9:37:03 AM
number 16 looks epic, I'm going to give this a try.
Yoink: Baiting and Hooking Thread 4 on 7/25/2020 4:05:23 AM
I certainly would If I knew what I meant by writing that lol
Just started writing a new story/game instead of writing about labyrinths, it's about time travel and tea and totalitarian AI, and more random stuff. Not sure how to continue it though...